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Ridge Racer (video game)
I've listed this article for peer review because I've been working on getting this article up to GA standards and I'd like some feedback before I nominate it. It was C-class before I started and I have got it up to B class. I have since made further improvements and I think it's pretty close but there may still be one or two unreliable sources. Is there anything that needs further expansion? Any feedback is appreciated.

Thanks, Adam9007 (talk) 00:45, 28 September 2015 (UTC)

Comments by RO

 * Gameplay
 * However, the game does not update to reflect the switch
 * Avoid using however in encyclopedic writing.


 * and the player always starts in last place
 * This needs an in-line citation.


 * The game consists of 4 races; Novice, Intermediate, Advanced and Time Trial (in the latter 2, the track is extended).[12]
 * Per MOS:NUMERAL, spell out numbers from one to nine.


 * The PlayStation version also has hidden 'mirror' version of the tracks. 
 * These single quote marks ought to be double.


 * Development and release
 * At JAMMA's 1992 AM (Amusement Machines) show in Japan, 
 * Spell out AM on the first occurrence?


 * the hardest part to port
 * I'm not sure casual readers will understand this.


 * Reception
 * However, they criticized that the game 
 * Avoid however in encyclopedic writing.


 * praising the addictive gameplay and the outstanding music
 * These words are WP:PEACOCK when in Wikipedia's voice. Quote or paraphrase.


 * However, they complained that "there is no two-player mode"
 * Same as above.


 * Despite the positive reviews of the game, it was later criticized by 
 * This would be better as, "Despite several positive reviews, the game was later ..."


 * "is a fun title that racing fans [...] will love."
 * Those brackets are unnecessary.


 * Impact
 * Ridge Racer also received a number of ports and spin-offs
 * Needs citation


 * Ridge Racer Full Scale
 * A Full Scale arcade version of Ridge Racer was released alongside the standard arcade version in 1993.
 * I'm not sure the casual reader will understand the distinction. Can you explain this better?


 * The steering wheel could be re-linked to the rack and pinion steering of the car, making it easier to move.
 * Needs citation


 * Ridge Racer: 3 Screen Edition
 * only available in the sit down version
 * Is this the same as the home version, or is this a sit down arcade version?

This is a nice article overall. I found mostly minor nit-picks and fixed a few. My biggest issue is that parts might be a little too jargon for casual readers, though experienced gamers will no doubt have no trouble. Good job; keep up the great work! RO (talk) 20:43, 29 October 2015 (UTC)
 * Ridge Racer Turbo
 * You mention the release year for the other versions, so why not this one?
 * Conclusion

Comments by 3family6

 * Sourcing
 * The International Arcade Museum includes a lot of user-generated content. Without knowing in more detail how it works, and whether the content cited in this article is user-generated or not, I would not use this site.
 * Genius.com is also user-generated. Perhaps cite the song itself.
 * This is a deadlink. Archive.org does have an archived version to use. Same with this link - the new url is here. The FHM list is also dead - archived link here.
 * In some spots, you give a citation, followed by a specific page note, which is fine. But this is not applied consistently, as some of the citations to Electronic Gaming Monthly include the page note directly in the citation. Either method is fine, there just needs to be some consistency.
 * Likewise, there is some inconsistency in date usage. Some are this format: September 28, 2015; while others are this: 2012-11-09; others just give the year, some have no retrieval date.
 * Make sure that all citations follow a similar format. If a web link, include the original url, the archive url if the original link is dead, the website, with wikilink if applicable, the source date, if applicable, the archive date, if applicable, and the retrieval date (always). With print sources, include the author, article title, publication, publication date, publisher (if a book, also the publisher location), page number(s), and, if applicable, the ISSN or ISBN number.


 * Grammar
 * Development and release
 * "...the PlayStation version had to essentially be done from scratch..." - split infinitive. Re-write as "essentially had to be done."
 * "Although they criticized that the game suffers from graphical glitches and slowdown, though they gave it an overall recommendation." - This doesn't even make sense. The following is better, both grammatically and stylistically: "They did find some graphical glitches and slowdown, but recommended the game overall."

Overall, I'd say fix the dead links and the grammar errors, remove the user generated sources, and this is ready for GA. My comments about consistency in sourcing are probably not going to effect a GA review; however, they still need to be done, and for this peer review I'm holding the article close to FA standards. To be an FA, the language and style would need to be polished more as well, but for a GAR, take care of the dead links, unreliable sources, and grammar, and you are set.-- 3family6 ( Talk to me   &#124;  See what I have done  ) 18:27, 2 November 2015 (UTC)

Thanks for the suggestions, I've fixed most of the problems (including an undetected copyright violation!). For statements I couldn't cite, I simply removed, and as for peacock terms in the reception section, I don't have access to the sources, so the best I could do was remove the peacock terms. I'm also not sure where else I can cite instead of The International Arcade Museum, as I'm not familiar with the site myself and I don't know where they get their information from. I hope GA isn't beyond this article's reach. Adam9007 (talk) 02:36, 19 November 2015 (UTC)