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Ron Paul

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 * A script has been used to generate a semi-automated review of the article for issues relating to grammar and house style; it can be found on the automated peer review page for September 2008.

This peer review discussion has been closed. I've listed this article for peer review because I feel that it is a very well written article, and thoroughly examines its subject in a clear, concise format. In my opinion, very worthy of being a featured article.

Thanks, CoolKid1993 (talk) 08:49, 14 September 2008 (UTC)

Why does his infobox make it seem like he is an incumbent in two districts?--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM) 00:02, 15 September 2008 (UTC)

I agree. Infobox needs updating to show which terms he has served in which district. I couldn't dig up this information in 5 minutes, or I would have done it myself.--SV Resolution(Talk) 18:15, 19 September 2008 (UTC)

Comments from
 * The prose is needs a once-over; just watch out for redundancies and vagueness:
 * "He is an outspoken proponent for ballot access and numerous election law reforms which would allow more voter control."
 * "There are eighteen grandchildren." Maybe "They have 18 grandchildren" or something like that,
 * "In 1956, Paul proposed marriage to Wells; the couple were wed on February 1, 1957..." "were"-->was
 * "Paul was the third of five sons born during seven years in the Great Depression," Unclear. What is "seven years" referring to?
 * Em dashes should be unspaced.
 * "Paul authors many more bills than the average representative" A source for this is needed.
 * Date linking is deprecated by the MOS.
 * There must be more info about Paul's family and marriage. Look for print sources.
 * "In 'The Revolution: A Manifesto', Paul states his views on earmarks this way:" This should not be bolded.
 * "He moved to Surfside Beach, Texas, on July 31, 1968, and eventually delivered more than 4,000 babies." This sentence is a rather abrupt transition. Make a note that Paul started a practice in the town.
 * Per Captions, only captions that are full sentences should have a period. Dabomb87 (talk) 14:45, 20 September 2008 (UTC)