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Russian Business Network

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I've listed this article for peer review because:


 * It is of a highly topical nature and regularly quoted as a key reference in many of the world's newspapers, technical magazines, internet security websites and blogs. Therefore it should be of the highest quality representing Wikipedia.


 * Although I started this article and have since added citations and references, the purpose of the article was to accurately inform.  To begin with the very subject nature was contentious and amorphous, however as the article has developed over time, it has become more concrete. Therefore it has evolved to become a work of the wider community in the spirit of Wikipedia.


 * This article should be developed into a featured article status. Therefore any feedback on what else could be done to achieve this before nominating it for FA.  At the very least I feel that it should be entered as a good article.
 * I feel that Russian Business Network would be a suitable FA candidate, with any feedback provided. In terms of subject matter, it is not dissimilar to a similar topic Storm botnet which is an existing FA.

All constructive comments gratefully received,

Thanks,

Jart351 (talk)


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It looks like a great start. You've collected a good number of sources, and for an article on an internet organization, it is natural that most of these are web sites. Here are some things that need fixing:


 * You should try to avoid external links in the body of the article. These should be replaced with footnotes (including the links) in a standard format.
 * The "external links" section, then, should be just a list of the most essential links.
 * The coverage isn't quite comprehensive enough for an FA. I'd like to see more about the history of the organization and about the leaders of the organization. For example, do we know who the Russian politician you mention is?
 * You need to carefully copyedit the prose throughout. The lead, for instance, has a stray comma and phrases such as "is has developed".

Good luck! Lesgles ( talk ) 03:50, 25 January 2008 (UTC)