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Sabah Tshung Tsin Secondary School

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 * A script has been used to generate a semi-automated review of the article for issues relating to grammar and house style; it can be found on the automated peer review page for August 2008.

This peer review discussion has been closed. I've listed this article for peer review because I have been working on this article and have seen it improved a lot since I have started it. Grammar & spelling mistakes have been fixed and the article is not too long and not too short. I am aware that it is quite impossible for a school article to achieve FA status, but I plan to bring this article to GA, or at least B. I want to know what are the things I have left out, and what can be done to improve this article, before I nominate it for GA.

Thanks, Kristalyamaki (talk) 15:41, 8 August 2008 (UTC)

Review from Five Years
Here are some suggestions for the article: If you have any questions on this review, or need more feedback on the article, please feel free to leave a note on my talk page. Thanks. Five Years 17:08, 14 August 2008 (UTC)
 * The lead doesnt summarise the article, it makes no mention of the facilities, achievements etc.
 * The section entitled "school fees" should be changed to "fees".
 * The school fees section is unreferenced. The POV that students at Tshung Tsin are rich spiled brats needs to be removed.
 * There is little mention of Academics in the article, which is worth of a heading. The heading should contain information on academic achievements.
 * The "success & Achievements" section is unsightly and should be removed with information merged into other sections as appropriate.
 * The facilities section should be changed to Campus.
 * The campus section should include information on the size of the campus, any notable buildings, features or ovals located on it.
 * There is little information about Extracurricular activities at the school, eg. sports, debating, the arts, music. Each of these needs a sub-heading.
 * The Annual events section should be removed. Any salvageable information should be moved into the Extracurricular activities section.
 * The administration section should be removed. A list of former principals of the school would be a good replacement.
 * The annual events section should be removed, it is of little encyclopedic use to anyone outside the school. What information is salvageable


 * Ruhrfisch comment you say it is impossible to get a school article to FA, but there are two high school FAs that may be useful models: Stuyvesant High School and Plano Senior High School. Hoe this helps, Ruhrfisch &gt;&lt;&gt; &deg; &deg; 18:23, 14 August 2008 (UTC)