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Sabana Grande, Caracas
I've listed this article for peer review because I think it needs some proofreading, in order to check grammar and other stuff.

Thanks, QuinteroP (talk) 11:07, 13 March 2019 (UTC)


 * Comment from Jamez42 I made this edit per WP:NPOV and WP:BLOWITUP since the article currently has a lot of promotional and non-encyclopedic content. A peer review would definitely help. --Jamez42 (talk) 11:59, 13 March 2019 (UTC)


 * Comments from Richard3120: Honestly, I think it's too long, and it sounds more like a travel guidebook than an encyclopedia article. It contains lots of trivia, statements that are unsourced or from unreliable sources, and personal opinion ("to really improve the conditions of the Sabana Grande district, it is necessary that the Venezuelan middle class thrive"). 38 pictures is probably too many as well. The lede is too long and again full of trivia like listing names of shops (why are these important?) or anecdotes like it was the last place that Gustavo Cerati went out to party. Maybe Jamez42 was a bit drastic with his edit, but it definitely needs cutting down and rewriting in parts. Richard3120 (talk) 15:38, 13 March 2019 (UTC)
 * Comments from Domdeparis This article is way too long it is almost twice as long as the article for Caracas the capital of which it is a collection of districts. I don't even know how many people live in this are nor how much surface it covers. The lead vaguely refers to it as such The Sabana Grande district is divided into several middle class urbanizations located in the Parroquia El Recreo of the Libertador Municipality, in the geographical center of the Metropolitan District of Greater Caracas and owes its name to the old town of Sabana Grande.. There isn't even a map to show what area it covers. I even think the article that was accepted at AFC was way too long with far too many photos. I am afraid that I agree with Jamez42 and this article is a prime candidate for WP:BLOWITUP. This reads like a guidebook for the district and clearly fails WP:NOTGUIDE and WP:NOTPLUG. The time spent in copyediting this would be I am afraid a serious waste. I would be of the opinion of moving it to draft space to allow QuinteroP the time to work on it themselves and for it to be submitted as at AFC again. I would also suggest merging anything in this article Boulevard of Sabana Grande and creating a redirect to here. Dom from Paris (talk) 18:02, 13 March 2019 (UTC)