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Sakib
This peer review discussion has been closed. I've listed this article for peer review because it needs some grammar and language check, also it needs some improvement.

Thanks,  Historyfeelings  - talk 07:10, 20 February 2012 (UTC)

Comments The Rambling Man (talk) 13:43, 27 February 2012 (UTC)
 * Reasonable structure to the article, suggest you look at similar FAs to see what level of detail is expected.
 * The Karak dab needs to be fixed.
 * The link to the name in Arabic shouldn't be a transwiki link, it should be a link to Arabic language followed by the translation.
 * A lot of copyediting needs to be done really, I'll point some out but suggest it goes to a good copyeditor as well.
 * In general, translate metric units (e.g. 8 km) into Imperial ones (e.g. 8 km (5 mi)).
 * A lot of the article is unreferenced, e.g. the "The name" section.
 * Per WP:HEAD, that section should just be called "Name" or even better, something like "Etymology"
 * Avoid linking very common terms like "water" and "rain" and "mountain" and "valley" for instance.
 * Don't link individual dates or years.
 * Fix the [citation needed] tag (and provide more citations throughout).
 * The various tables and graphs are somewhat messy, if you add more text throughout it might help reduce the clutter.
 * Hight should be Height.
 * " are: [12] [13] [14]" don't put a space between the colon and the ref, and don't put spaces between refs.
 * "maximum temperature Average(°C)" -> "Maximum temperature average (°C)"
 * Don't see a need to have the "hide" feature for the table.
 * "City is famous for its Olive, fig, Grape and " -> "The city is noted for its olive and fig trees..." no such thing as a Grape tree, avoid capitalising nouns which are not proper nouns.
 * Galleries generally avoided, if you expanded the article you could use one or two of these images in the expanded sections.
 * References need to be properly formatted, you could use the cite web template for a consistent look.