Wikipedia:Peer review/Same-sex marriage in Canada/archive1

Same-sex marriage in Canada
This article is good, but needs some work so it can eventually be re-nominated for feature article status. Ardenn 07:00, 12 April 2006 (UTC)


 * I suggest the following:
 * WP:LEAD- please shortern the lead, to a maximum of 3 paragraphs, so that it is brief and terse
 * WP:V and WP:FOOTNOTE- instead of imbedded external links, convert them to inline citations. There are also many numbers that should be cited.
 * WP:CITE- (in addition to the footnotes) have citation information for the sources used (consider Cite web
 * WP:MOS- remove the "the"s in front of the headings
 * WP:WIAFA- simplify the long ToC, and "that the prose is compelling, even brilliant"
 * Thanks, AndyZ t 19:38, 15 April 2006 (UTC)