Wikipedia:Peer review/San Gabriel Valley/archive1

San Gabriel Valley
If you go into this article's history, you can clearly see that someone, using an IP beginning with 172.xx, has spent an incredible amount of time and energy preparing this for Wikipedia (see the talk page). However, I am not going to nominate it yet for a featured article, as I feel that something does need to be improved. Does anybody here have any comments on this article? &mdash; Stevey7788 (talk) 17:30, 18 July 2005 (UTC)
 * I agree Stevey. It's good but it lacks the sense of being "complete". I think firstly there is a disproportionate about of space dedicated to the ethnic composition of the population, firstly in the "People" section, then also in the "Asian American" section. I think these should be condensed into one section, and abbreviated.   By comparison, the other topics are covered very briefly, and could be expanded a little.  I also think the two lists that follow on from the lead paragraph would be better at the end of the article, although I also think that where possible lists should be converted into prose, especially for FA consideration.  There are several cities/countries/regions already listed as Featured Articles - maybe the easiest way to determine a suitable format would be to look through them, especially articles such as Gangtok, which are fairly recently promoted.  They're all different, but have certain characteristics in common, so adapting those ideas into this article can only improve it.  The other big issue is that it lacks references.  If it gets nominated for FA without references, it'll get jumped all over, I'm afraid.  Rossrs 15:19, 22 July 2005 (UTC)