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Savannah State University
I've listed this article for peer review because it has been significantly improved since its original creation and copy editing occured to remove all copyvio information. Thanks, Absolon S. Kent (talk) 03:14, 2 January 2008 (UTC)

RE: Peer Review

 * Mission statement should be merged into the academics description
 * Notable campus events includes trivia, which are discouraged in articles.
 * Academic profile section should be renamed to Academics and Demographics per WP:UNI's article guidelines.
 * Research Centers section should be merged into the summary of buildings in the Campus section.
 * The Schools and Colleges section should be integrated with the Areas of Study section. Separately, it's kind of awkward and it looks as if you're restating the same material.
 * Other academic programs section is awkwardly placed. It should probably integrate it with the academic programs description.
 * The Want more information? infobox on the Notable faculty and staff section seems out of place. The Want more information title almost sounded as if the article's advertising SSU, but it's not.  My suggestion would be to place the links to the "See Also" section.
 * Athletics section should be embedded in the Student Life section.
 * School Colors and School Mascot section should be deleted since the material is already covered in the Infobox University for SSU.
 * The same deal with the Athletics' "want more info" box, please move the links into "See Also"
 * Organization section should be placed as the first sentence of the Athletics section prior to the NCAA intro. Trivial information regarding the Athletic Director is unremarkable, therefore should be removed.  This is an encyclopedia article, not a roster.  Readers who require names will be better served by clicking to the university's athletics dept link on the External Links section.
 * Athletic Facilities should be mentioned in the Campus section
 * Athletics infobox is completely unnecessary and should be only placed in the athletics article.
 * Re: SSU in the news
 * Winless BBall Season should be integrated into the Athletics section
 * The court case should be integrated into the History section.
 * Convention naming methods suggests that "Suggested Reading" be renamed to "Further Reading"
 * Footnotes should be renamed to "References"


 * This section has also been posted on the Talk:Savannah State University page.
 * I welcome comments regarding my findings or to clear up any misunderstandings if I was vague in my descriptions. Happy 2008!   - Jameson L. Tai   talk  ♦  contribs   03:14, 3 January 2008 (UTC)

updates
Absolon S. Kent (talk) 04:32, 3 January 2008 (UTC)
 * Mission statement should be merged into the academics description - ✅
 * Notable campus events includes trivia, which are discouraged in articles. - ❌ merged into history section
 * Academic profile section should be renamed to Academics and Demographics per WP:UNI's article guidelines. - ✅
 * Research Centers section should be merged into the summary of buildings in the Campus section. - ❌ The Research Centers are not actual facilties but are programs operated by the University
 * The Schools and Colleges section should be integrated with the Areas of Study section. Separately, it's kind of awkward and it looks as if you're restating the same material. - ✅
 * Other academic programs section is awkwardly placed. It should probably integrate it with the academic programs description. - ✅
 * The Want more information? infobox on the Notable faculty and staff section seems out of place. The Want more information title almost sounded as if the article's advertising SSU, but it's not.  My suggestion would be to place the links to the "See Also" section. - - ❌ Renamed
 * Athletics section should be embedded in the Student Life section. - ✅
 * School Colors and School Mascot section should be deleted since the material is already covered in the Infobox University for SSU. - ✅
 * The same deal with the Athletics' "want more info" box, please move the links into "See Also" - ❌ Renamed
 * Organization section should be placed as the first sentence of the Athletics section prior to the NCAA intro. Trivial information regarding the Athletic Director is unremarkable, therefore should be removed.  This is an encyclopedia article, not a roster.  Readers who require names will be better served by clicking to the university's athletics dept link on the External Links section. - ✅
 * Athletic Facilities should be mentioned in the Campus section - ✅
 * Athletics infobox is completely unnecessary and should be only placed in the athletics article. - ❌ see above discussion
 * Re: SSU in the news
 * Winless BBall Season should be integrated into the Athletics section - ✅
 * The court case should be integrated into the History section. - ✅
 * Convention naming methods suggests that "Suggested Reading" be renamed to "Further Reading" - ✅
 * Footnotes should be renamed to "References" - ✅


 * A script has been used to generate a semi-automated review of the article for issues relating to grammar and house style. If you would find such a review helpful, please click here. Thanks, APR t 01:53, 5 January 2008 (UTC)