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Scene7

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This peer review discussion has been closed. I've listed this article for peer review because I'd like to eventually bring it to WP:FAC. Thanks! Gary King ( talk ) 00:56, 14 November 2008 (UTC)

–Juliancolton Tropical Cyclone  17:26, 14 November 2008 (UTC)
 * Comments
 * http://www.informationweek.com/blog/main/archives/2007/05/adobe_adds_scen.html (ref #2) is a blog, and is thus probably non-reliable.
 * What makes http://www.internetretailer.com/internet/marketing-conference/33577-imaging-technology-giant-adobe-acquires-rich-media-provider-scene7.html (ref #14) reliable?
 * Otherwise, sources look good.
 * Both references replaced Gary King  ( talk ) 20:07, 14 November 2008 (UTC)


 * Brianboulton comments: I have carried out a copyedit. If I have inadvertently altered a meaning, or injected some unwelcome Brit-English into the prose, please revert. I also picked up a few points:-
 * In the lead, I'd specify that the $30m received was venture capital
 * Also in lead, I think I'd say relaunched rather than launched
 * In the Company section, second para, should "on November 9" be "from November 9"?
 * Third para: you've linked "e-commerce, but it has been mentioned several times earlier - should be linked on first mention
 * What does this mean: "to power the company's media platform"? This was one of the few business jargon phrases in the article.
 * Last sentence of this section is unreferenced - but do you actually need it? It adds nothing to what's already been said about zooming and dynamic interaction.
 * History section: The company was sold "along with 40 developers". If these were company employees I suggest you say "The company, with its software development staff of 40, was sold..."
 * Any more details about the "six firms"?
 * "Engage is the parent company..." I think should be "was"
 * Acquisition section: Try to reduce the repetition of "services" in the sentence beginning: "Scene7's services..."

I hope these comments are helpful. Brianboulton (talk) 20:02, 14 November 2008 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the copyedit and the comments! These are all done now. Gary King  ( talk ) 20:15, 14 November 2008 (UTC)