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Selena singles discography
This peer review discussion has been closed. I've listed this article for peer review because the article went through two FLCs however, it failed miserably. I am aiming for the article to be a FL.
 * Previous peer review

Thanks, AJona1992 (talk) 13:01, 16 September 2011 (UTC)


 * Comments by Bradley0110

Bradley0110 (talk) 18:38, 10 October 2011 (UTC)
 * Have you ensured that every concern and oppose raised in the previous FLCs have been addressed?
 * "To date, Selena has sold 4,435,500 singles worldwide." This is sourced to an article published six years ago, so how can the figure be "to date"?
 * Much of the writing is unclear. Some examples:
 * "After Selena had won her first Grammy Award for her third studio and first live album, Selena Live! (1993), it had spawned three singles, which were in the top five in the Hot Latin Tracks chart." The wording of this sentence is quite confusing; can it please be clarified.
 * "The four singles [...] boosted Selena's fan base and bookings, as she toured in her Amor Prohibido Tour (1994–95) in Puerto Rico, South America and Northeastern United States, where she wasn't once recognized." This appears either contradictory - her fan base was boosted but she wasn't ("was not" for a formally written article please) recognised - or just not clearly phrased.
 * "The Barrio Boyzz re-recorded "Dondequiera Que Estés" in English, while Selena's Spanish verse stood the same, it was titled "Wherever You Are", the song entered Spain's music chart for two years." This appears to be three separate ideas merged into one sentence.
 * (1) will do (2) others over exaggerated in her sales, such as one states she sold over 200 million copies which is not true. I had choose that publication because it was a tribute issue for her 10th anniversary and most of the content were true based on information her family had stated. (3) I'm not sure what you mean? Selena Live! was a live album but also considered to be a studio album since it contained three new tracks that peaked in the top 5 of the Hot Latin Tracks chart. (4) before Amor Prohibido was released, Selena was only known in southern states of the United States and Mexico, no where else. (5) will do. Thanks for your review, I'll fix them. Jona yo!  Selena 4 ever  18:47, 10 October 2011 (UTC)