Wikipedia:Peer review/Sendai, Miyagi/archive1

Sendai, Miyagi
Not only do I have a personal connection with the city and therefore would like to see it someday as a Featured Article, I think it is well-written and rather thorough, especially on its culture, which is a part that many city articles seem to lack. It also lists a few sources, but I know that a large number of sources seem to be preferred for FACs, so if you could list improvements that that might need, that'd be great. Although I am not a major contributor to the article (very minor edits here and there) I feel that a peer review might show what needs to be improved should it be nominated for FA-status.

Also, if anyone can help claify what copyright the map would fall under, that would be greatly appreciated. I've been asking around but I haven't really gotten a concrete answer.

-Nameneko 05:50, 15 September 2005 (UTC)


 * Some references urgently required, e.g., 'Although the Sendai area was inhabited as early as 20,000 years ago'. The text at the top is bumped up against the map. Spell out '1' and '8'. What is a 'designated' city? Avoid 'found at' and 'found in' more than once or twice. Some of the English is unidiomatic, and the whole article needs a thorough copy edit. Some of the sections are too short, as is the article as a whole. There's not enough comparison with other cities/parts of Japan. Tony 14:00, 17 September 2005 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the input The '20,000 years ago' part is implied later on briefly:
 * [...] Tomizawa Site Museum, which is built directly above a 20,000-year-old stone age excavation site
 * I don't know how well that would work, but I'll look into the Japanese article to see how they reference it and work on translating at the same time. I'll try to search for sources sometime in the future.  I've added a link for the "designated city" portion, replaced 1 and 8 with their respective words, and will find and replace the "found" phrases in the near future.  I noticed that the sections really grouped together various things into one or two paragraphs.  What I plan to do is get more information from the ja.wikipedia article and then find sources to back the information up.  I get most of what you mean, but the only thing I'd like clarification for is comparisons with other Japanese cities.  What kind of comparisons would be helpful?  Cultural?  Demographic?  Economic?
 * -Nameneko 18:47, 17 September 2005 (UTC)


 * I too have personal relationship as I lived there for a year while studying abroad. Truly an amazing city. SO amazing I want to live there permanently. Anyway I added some information about the University. But what I find most concerning is that there are no images of demographical data and such. When I go to a geographic page, that kind of data is what I want to know. I want to know where the people are. What variation of house prizes there are in different areas. What kind of jobs one can get there and so on. Seriously needs to be added. Lord Metroid 20:30, 30 October 2006 (UTC)