Wikipedia:Peer review/Seventh-day Adventist Church/archive2

Seventh-day Adventist Church
Peer review/Seventh-day Adventist Church/archive1

I am wondering if this article could achieve Featured Article status. It was previously a candidate in December 2005, and was classified as a Good Article. In the last 12 months it has undergone a major overhaul. Would appreciate it if people could assess it again and suggest any changes that need to be made to further improve the article. Thank you. Tonicthebrown 07:41, 25 January 2007 (UTC)
 * Assorted comments:
 * The header should specify what they consider to be the Sabbath, since it's important enough to be in the name of the church.
 * First two parts of Origins and early history section have no inline refs at all. That material does not sound completely uncontroversial.
 * "however some Adventists do approve of wedding bands." - cite, or merely remove, since your specify "more conservative"
 * "Note: The preferred abbreviation" - who prefers? Stating it that way implies the Wikipedia prefers. Also doesn't seem to be true if the GLBT org is SDA Kinship...
 * "as of 2006" - can't we get to "as of 2007"?
 * Firstly, secondly, thirdly - awkward.
 * Cite the citation needed tags.
 * Describe "the negativity" with which other churches are viewed. To some extent, most churches consider all others to be at least somewhat incorrect, if this church goes beyond that, specify.
 * "Adventist scholars such as Fred Veltman have contested this." Link, cite, or remove. Presumably Adventist scholars contest all criticisms, it's assumed; if Veltman is special, specify, or at least link and/or cite.
 * "unique recipe" - without giving the whole thing, what's unique about it? Or is that supposed to mean that there are thousands of distinct recipes? Specify. The off-cite link is different in style from most of the other inline references, better to use just one style.
 * Are the distinctive teachings numbered individually among the 28? If so, it may be useful to give each number. Is there common agreement as to which of the 28 are particularly distinctive, or is this just one scholar's view that these are more distinctive than others? Cite thoroughly.
 * Ten Commandments - which ten? There are at least two if not more different counts...
 * How many of them are there? How does that stand relative to other churches? Where are they in the world? A distribution map wouldn't hurt. If there are major centers outside the US, how & when did they get there?
 * "lady by the name of" -> "named" --AnonEMouse (squeak) 20:10, 22 February 2007 (UTC)

Thanks kindly for your remarks, AnonEMouse. Tonicthebrown 11:55, 24 February 2007 (UTC)