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Shady Records


This peer review discussion has been closed. I've listed this article for peer review because a lot of effort has been made to make this article as informative and encyclopaedic as possible. I would like for this article to some day receive FA status if possible, so anything that can be done to improve it to it's current rating, including small things to the addition of more information that could be added (sections, perhaps). To my knowledge, no record label has actually received a GA/A/FA status, and with the hard work I feel that's been put in, it would be nice to see that I have been able to contribute something like this to Wikipedia at a high standard.

Thanks, Harish - 16:05, 3 February 2008 (UTC)


 * A script has been used to generate a semi-automated review of the article for issues relating to grammar and house style. If you would find such a review helpful, please click here. Thanks, APR t 15:22, 5 February 2008 (UTC)
 * Are you saying that this is all that's left before it's worthy of a high status like GA or even FA? -- Harish - 01:33, 6 February 2008 (UTC)

Here are my thoughts on what looks like a diamond in the rough. There ya go, I hope that's all constructive. Best of luck with it. Seegoon (talk) 20:13, 6 February 2008 (UTC)
 * Comments from
 * The first paragraph of the lead is pretty lumpy. For stuff like this, I'd just delete it and rewrite it from scratch. The first sentence is fine, it does what it needs to, but the rest of it is repetitive and doesn't run smoothly at all. I'm not sure that it's overly relevant to which label Eminem is signed; at least it's not important enough to be in the first paragraph. WP:LEAD says that the lead should sum up the major points of the article and be readable as a synthesis in its own right.
 * ✅. -- Harish - 14:36, 10 February 2008 (UTC)
 * Likewise, the first sentence of the second paragraph is confusing too.
 * ✅. -- Harish - 14:36, 10 February 2008 (UTC)
 * "After Eminem released The Marshall Mathers LP, he started his own record label in late 2000. Eminem started this label with his manager, Paul Rosenberg. Eminem" - Eminem, Eminem, Eminem. Sometimes "he" does the job.
 * ✅. Reworded the line instead though. -- Harish - 20:43, 7 February 2008 (UTC)
 * "By June, 2001" - I don't think you need the comma here. There are multiple instances of this.
 * ✅. -- Harish - 20:43, 7 February 2008 (UTC)
 * "Devil's Night, with success" - sounds a little weak. "To commercial success", or something a bit meatier, might do the trick a little better.
 * ✅. -- Harish - 20:43, 7 February 2008 (UTC)
 * "radio station, Shade 45, air" - what's the "air" bit about?
 * ✅. Corrected its use. -- Harish - 20:43, 7 February 2008 (UTC)
 * Overall I like 2000-2004. I think it would benefit from a free-use image if you can get hold of one.
 * "This spawned the controversy that followed [...] was no longer a Shady Records involved project" - I think this entire section needs rewriting. It's confusing as hell and takes away from an otherwise well-written lead-up.
 * "2005 also saw the sixth signing to Shady Records. This artist is also an Atlanta rapper, and he goes by the name of Bobby Creekwater." - the tone here is totally bizarre.
 * ✅. -- Harish - 20:43, 7 February 2008 (UTC)
 * "In 2006, Shady Records had their seventh artist, by the name of Cashis, signed to the label [...] However, seemingly the state of the rap industry, the album sales did not fair well" - this is another crappy section.
 * The release dates in the discography table are formatted pretty weirdly.
 * Discussed. An understanding as to why this is so has been made. -- Harish - 20:43, 7 February 2008 (UTC)
 * Thank you, Seegoon! -- Harish - 20:43, 7 February 2008 (UTC)


 * From the instructions: "Please do not include any images, such as done/not done templates with tick/cross graphics..." Ruhrfisch &gt;&lt;&gt; &deg; &deg; 01:57, 21 February 2008 (UTC)