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Sheffield
This peer review discussion has been closed. I've listed this article for peer review because it used to be a featured article, and was removed in 2009. I've read through the article and personally, cannot see any issues. There was one citation needed tag, which I added a source for. I personally feel the article is ready to be a featured article again, but obviously I need some more opinions!

Thanks, -- Jack ?! 03:04, 7 July 2010 (UTC)

Comments from Niagara

Governance
 * "...gained the council from NOC..."
 * Spell out "NOC"

- Changed the sentence to make this clear.
 * "...during the 1980s administration under David Blunkett..."
 * What position did Blunkett hold?

Geography
 * I'd recommend using Panorama for the panorama of Sheffield.


 * "...across the city.[34][3]"
 * When more than one citation is used concurrently, make sure the are ordered from lowest to highest. ([3][34])

- moved up to the section suggested.
 * "and, according to Sheffield City Council, it is England's greenest city,[37] a claim that was reinforced when it won the 2005 Entente Florale competition."
 * Sentence fragment, also it might be good to move this claim up near the claim of being the European city with the most "trees per person".
 * "...off NE England..."
 * Spell out NE; same goes for "SW England"


 * "5,798,361 tonnes"
 * Link the unit, also, see about providing a conversion to tons. ❌
 * Not completely sure what is meant by the conversion, or how I would go about this.
 * In short, the equivalent of a "tonne" in the US is a "ton"; one "tonne" is equal to ~1.102 "tons". Convert is able to handle this easily. ​​​​​​ ​​ Niagara ​​Don't give up the ship 02:46, 15 July 2010 (UTC)

- works much better
 * Would putting the various historical populations of Sheffield into Historical populations, work better?

Economy
 * "60 MW"
 * Link and spell out "MW"

Transportation - no it wasn't. - I will take a new picture when possible (I have just invested in a new camera). It shows the station at night, which is clear to me, but, understandably, not to others.
 * "...city to London via the East Midlands,"
 * Is the emphasis on "via" needed?
 * Is their a better photo of the Sheffield railway station? Frankly, I'm not sure what, exactly, it shows.
 * If you are not able to get a better photo, there are a some interior and platform photos in the station's article that will work just as well. ​​​​​​ ​​ Niagara ​​Don't give up the ship 02:46, 15 July 2010 (UTC)

Culture and attractions
 * "...a 24hr service..."
 * Spell out "24h"

Twin towns and sister cities - I think this was because Kashmir has a strange political situation, but done, as it is part of Pakistan.
 * Is their any particular reason why the flag of Kashmir is used as the identifier for Kotli, Pakistan, when the other twin towns and sister cities use a national flag?
 * Understandable, I take it that this would be the same reason Kashmir is the only the political subdivision included in the list. ​​​​​​ ​​ Niagara ​​Don't give up the ship 02:46, 15 July 2010 (UTC)


 * "Two roads in Sheffield have been named after sister cities. A section of the Sheffield Parkway in Norton is named Bochum Parkway, and a road in Hackenthorpe is named Donetsk Way."
 * Use a colon between the two sentences, instead of a full-stop.

Interesting and well-written article; I could see this becoming an FA. Consider reviewing an article in the backlog, which is how I found yours. ​​​​​​ ​​ Niagara ​​Don't give up the ship 00:53, 14 July 2010 (UTC)