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Sid Haig
This peer review discussion has been closed. I've listed this article for peer review because I had nominated it two times for Good Article and was told by the person who failed it that I should run it by PR before renominating. I don't think it'll ever get FA status but I would like it to achieve GA.

Thanks, CyberGhostface (talk) 03:11, 22 March 2008 (UTC)

Comments from
Hi CyberGhostface, some comments which should help the article on its way to GA. Hope some of that helps. The Rambling Man (talk) 11:56, 25 March 2008 (UTC)
 * Expand the lead per WP:LEAD, probably two paragraphs.
 * " is perhaps best known " - stick with encyclopaedic terminology.
 * "Haig's career began somewhat by accident" again, non-encyclopaedic, almost speculative.
 * "which shot to #4" - same again.
 * Headings per WP:HEAD should not have "The...", so just "Pasadena Playhouse" will suffice.
 * "When Sid ..." - overfamiliar. Use Haig.
 * Avoid squashing text between images per WP:MOS.
 * The prose could do with a good copyedit, it reads a little like a fan wrote it right now. It just needs to be tighter and more neutral and encyclopaedic in tone.
 * Most of Acting section is uncited.