Wikipedia:Peer review/Slayer/archive2

Slayer
Going for FAC really soon. I would like some last minute comments to fix any problems that would stop it from getting FA status, thx. M3tal H3ad 03:05, 10 January 2007 (UTC)


 * Please see automated peer review suggestions here. Thanks, APR t 21:00, 10 January 2007 (UTC)


 * Couldn't find any dates, unless the bot picks up things like In November, 1984. M3tal H3ad 01:25, 11 January 2007 (UTC)

Seems pretty good, but take care to give it a thorough copyedit (I spotted a couple of missing apostrophes on a skim through). There are also occasionally a run of short sentences, which breaks the flow. Also, is there nothing that can be mentioned about their influences, and the influence they had on other bands? The lead seems a bit superlative, as it is not explained later how they led a movement or defined a genre; it needs references. Trebor 19:37, 11 January 2007 (UTC)


 * Thanks for the comments, I just read every paragraph, made edits to fix the whole flow thing and i think it's better now. Never thought about that for influences, though I'll see what i can do. Good job spotting that out. M3tal H3ad 04:20, 12 January 2007 (UTC)


 * I changed the lead, removed the 'define genre', changed influential to in the 80's and added information that Reign in blood was ranked #1 a lot and a few influences under the section. Cheers M3tal H3ad 13:12, 12 January 2007 (UTC)


 * Looks good, nice work. Trebor 17:58, 12 January 2007 (UTC)