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Smithfield, London

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 * A script has been used to generate a semi-automated review of the article for issues relating to grammar and house style; it can be found on the automated peer review page for August 2008.

This peer review discussion has been closed. I've listed this article for peer review. It recently got GA status and has been considerably improved lately. Feedback on how to further improve this towards FA status would be welcome.

Thanks, DarTar (talk) 12:23, 26 August 2008 (UTC)

Passing on a review, as someone finally reviewed an article i submitted :-)

1. Lead seems very short for such a long article. Try summarising each of the sections to one paragrapgh each (History, Market, Development plans) and inserting into lead, making it 4 paras altogether. "The lead should be able to stand alone as a concise overview of the article."

2. Citations! I counted 6 paragraphs makng factual claims with no citations, and other long paragraphs making multiple claims with a cite in the middle, but none for the rest of the text. Maybe some can be diplicated (not for every sentence, but more than now), or new references need to be found.

3. When founded / built? It's history section starts with an undated naming, then jumps to the monastaries. Was Smooth fields just the name of the fields, or was the area already devoloped? Did it grow up around the monasteries? It currently sounds like a village was already there?

4. Should the Nightlife and Racing stuff not be under 20th century / Today sections, rather than history? Or those should be subsections of history, without market etc in between? Ah, now i see: Why are the subsections of "The Market" called "Victorian Smithfield" instead of "Victorian Smithfield Market" (and similar subheadings? It makes is seem that that section is talking about the whole area, and not just the market.

5. Are there any explanations as to why it has such a large market, and was the site for excecutions. It is easily accesible / flat / some aristocrat decided so...? If the sources exist, would be interesting to know. What makes it an area worth a seperate name? Is that just historical? Does it have a legal meaning (separate councillor? School district?)? Would it be marked so on maps or in the A to Z, or is it a name for locals? I'm unsure at the moment!

Good luck!

Oh, and I found this article here: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Wikipedia:Peer_review/backlog. If you found my comments helpful, please consider reviewing another article. Pass it on! :-)Yobmod (talk) 16:02, 2 September 2008 (UTC)