Wikipedia:Peer review/Snake scales/archive1

Snake scales
Snake scales is presently a GA. I would be grateful for the following kinds of feedback - For your info: the snake scale names in the sections dealing with nomenclature were bolded intentionally for maximum utility for readers to help them follow the annotated sketches effectively.
 * Ideas to improve the article.
 * MOS issues to improve the article.
 * Hints to bring it up to featured article quality.

Thanks in advance, AshLin

Review by Totnesmartin

The first think that strikes me is the essayish tone of the article. it has a unique "voice", as if written by a single, well-informed editor - and in fact this is almost the case. It would need some rewriting to resemble a typical WP article, as well as some tweaking of the explanations - for instance, the fairly well-known Dorsal is explained in the article, but the obscure Mental groove isn't. There are some other problems as well, such as the opening statement that scales are important to snakes because it classifies them as reptiles - it's not important to a snake' how it's classified by us. So yes, this is a good article but it needs style editing. The picture at the top is beautiful.

I can't comment on the scientific accuracy as it's outside my area. 11:58, 1 September 2007 (UTC)


 * Thank you for your observations. I am beginning work on this. AshLin 03:22, 4 September 2007 (UTC)
 * Changed the opening sentance of the lead.AshLin 05:05, 4 September 2007 (UTC)
 * Added explanation of the 'mental groove' and 'gular scales'.AshLin 05:05, 4 September 2007 (UTC)


 * Please see automated peer review suggestions here. Thanks, Ruhrfisch &gt;&lt;&gt; &deg; &deg; 02:46, 15 September 2007 (UTC)