Wikipedia:Peer review/Snow Patrol discography/archive1

Snow Patrol discography
This peer review discussion has been closed. I've listed this article for peer review because i want to make sure the list is as good as possible before its nominated for being featured.

Thanks, Suede67 (talk) 09:15, 7 August 2009 (UTC)

Brianboulton (talk) 23:27, 13 August 2009 (UTC)
 * About time! Any suggestions? Suede67 (talk) 09:09, 14 August 2009 (UTC)


 * About time? Sorry, I don't respond to remarks like that. Find someone else to review it. Brianboulton (talk) 16:36, 14 August 2009 (UTC)


 * ??? It was in complete good faith! I wasnt expecting someone would pick it up so late, I was getting nervous the 10 days would pass. Suede67 (talk) 17:54, 14 August 2009 (UTC)
 * OK, understood (see your talkpage). I will get to the review shortly. Brianboulton (talk) 18:38, 14 August 2009 (UTC)
 * Thank you! Suede67 (talk) 18:39, 14 August 2009 (UTC)

Brianboulton comments: Not much to say, really. The information looks comprehensive and well put together. A few suggestions on the prose:-
 * "Morrison left in 1995 - was he replaced?
 * His site says he "left due to a breakdown", so I'd say its unclear. I feel its better to say what the source says, rather than his site, as it could be biased. Suede67 (talk) 13:30, 15 August 2009 (UTC)


 * "Under this name they released their first EP, Starfighter Pilot, under the Electric Honey label." I have repunctuated, but can you avoid the "under the...", "under the..." repeat?


 * "Jeepster Records" or "the Jeepster label" would be preferable to just "Jeepster".


 * Presumably, "in 1998" not just "1998".


 * Parentheses unnecessary around "to Snow Patrol".


 * "...as Eric Avery, who had a side-project named Polar Bear threatened to sue." Too cryptic. You don't say who Eric Avery is, or what you mean by a side-project. I suggest a reword along the lines: "...because American bass player Ed Avery, who was already using the name "Polar Bear" in a recording project, threatened to sue."


 * Date of release for Final Straw?


 * Clarify whether Paul Wilson replaced Mark McClelland.


 * Give dates for Final Straw tour and Eyes Open release.


 * Explain what you mean by "boosted by the success of Chasing Cars".

That is pretty well all I can find. Brianboulton (talk) 13:09, 15 August 2009 (UTC)


 * Suede67 Comments: I have fixed all what you have suggested. But I do have a doubt though. The music videos section; there are 3 for which the director isn't known (in any sources for that matter). Will this be a problem in the FL nomination? Thanks for your review! I didnt think of those finer points that needed addressing. Suede67 (talk) 13:29, 15 August 2009 (UTC)
 * I am not very familiar with the FLC process, but if you have tried every known source and have been unable to find references to the directors of these videos, I do not imagine this will affect the outcome. Just note it in your nom statement. Brianboulton (talk) 16:38, 20 August 2009 (UTC)
 * Okay, thanks for your reply! Suede67 (talk) 17:26, 20 August 2009 (UTC)