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Somerset County Cricket Club in 2009
This peer review discussion has been closed. I've listed this article for peer review because it is the first article of this type that I have worked on, and I would like to get to get it up to GA (and maybe eventually FA) standard. My previous work has all been on cricketer biographies, so I'd like some input on how this can be improved. Specifically, information on whether I need greater detail on each competition (ie more about the actual games), or whether the balance is mostly alright as it is. Generally, my use of language, grammar and the overall layout of the article.

Thanks,  Harrias  talk 11:06, 15 August 2010 (UTC)
 * I think it would be good to know what their team structure was, eg 4/5 bowlers, 1/2/3? spinners....etc If the pitch at Somerset is more spin or pace oriented as well. Apart from that, their limited overs strategy is of interest, whether they go really fast at the start or accumulate all their resources for the last 20% of the innings. I think more detail in the FC is especially desirable, and in the T20 section it describes some important points in the matchs without explaining what the strengths and weaknesses of the team were  YellowMonkey  ( new photo poll )  03:11, 16 August 2010 (UTC)

Comments from TRM.
 * Lead is a little brief.
 * Yeah, I was coming to this conclusion myself!


 * Avoid bold links.
 * What would you suggest to avoid it? Not linking Somerset County Cricket Club, or not having it in bold?
 * Probably just unbold it. No need to get hung up on having bold in the lead if it's being forced... The Rambling Man (talk) 10:16, 24 August 2010 (UTC)


 * "The 2009 season also saw the retirement of Justin Langer from the team, relinquishing the captaincy to Marcus Trescothick for the following 2010 season." no need to say both "following" and "2010".
 * Removed 'following'.  Harrias  talk 17:10, 21 August 2010 (UTC)


 * Any reason that "Quarter-Final" is capitalised thus?
 * Changed to "Quarter-final"


 * Is NatWest Pro40 the same as Pro40? If so, why is the former red-linked?
 * The red link leads to the specific article for the 2008 NatWest Pro40.
 * Ok, understood. The Rambling Man (talk) 10:16, 24 August 2010 (UTC)


 * "Style" doesn't need capitalising in the table column headings.
 * Fixed.


 * Don't like leading zeros on single-digit days of the month.
 * It's just the way that the template does it I think.
 * Sadly it makes the article internally inconsistent... The Rambling Man (talk) 10:16, 24 August 2010 (UTC)


 * Are all the squad styles, dates of birth etc, referenced somewhere?
 * No, I'll add them to the table.


 * Tresco's caption needs a full stop
 * Fixed.


 * "The pitch at the County Ground, Taunton did not help their efforts, the imbalance in favour of the batsmen" reads a little ORish unless you have a specific ref.
 * Will look for one, I know there's something about it!
 * Added a reference for this now.  Harrias  talk 17:10, 21 August 2010 (UTC)


 * Bwl, not Bowl, is the heading for bowling points.
 * Fixed.


 * "Source: [26]" remove space and remove full stop.
 * Added name of source.


 * Are penalties/adjustments referenced anywhere?
 * In the previous source, will clarify.


 * Any reason why match log table isn't sortable?
 * A key to the colours would be useful to a non-expert here.
 * Would advocate a clear key for BBI, BBM, 5wi... I know they're linked, but it'd still be useful.
 * Alfonso's caption needs a full stop.
 * Fixed.


 * Season standings, what does bold text indicate?
 * I assume you're just referring to Somerset being emboldened; this is just done to make it clearer where Somerset are.


 * "Won by 5 wickets: Duckworth–Lewis method used." no need for full stop here.
 * Fixed.


 * de Bruyn's caption needs a full stop.
 * Fixed.


 * So does Walter's. So does the stadium image.
 * Fixed.


 * "with the match scheduled for Tuesday 28 July 2009" any need for the day of the week?
 * I don't remember, it felt necessary when I wrote it, I'll reassess.


 * refs 3&4 have spare full stops.
 * Fixed.


 * And ref 37.
 * Fixed.


 * Ref 112 needs an en-dash.
 * Fixed.


 * Be consistent in the refs with either spaced or unspaced slashes.
 * I've used whatever the source used, rather than applying my own formatting to their titles. Should I change them?

The Rambling Man (talk) 17:51, 17 August 2010 (UTC)
 * Thanks for your comments. I've addressed some of your issues already, while others I will either do with other edits, or have a look at later.  How do you feel the article works as a whole; your points so far have been technical in nature, but do you feel there is enough content, that the scope is about right, or should I include more (or less) detail on any issues?  Harrias  talk  15:49, 18 August 2010 (UTC)
 * Have responded directly to a few above. I think you've pitched the scope about right, don't think you need to do too much more in that respect.  The Rambling Man (talk) 10:16, 24 August 2010 (UTC)