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Spirit Fruit Society
This peer review discussion has been closed. I've listed this article for peer review because I am particularly fond of this article and would eventually like to see it go to Featured Article status. Passed GA in January 2012 and I am interested to know generally and specifically what the weaknesses are so I can improve the article.

The Spirit Fruit Society (don't be put off by the name!) was a commune founded in 1899 and is said to be one of the most successful and longest-lived groups of its kind. I find it an interesting topic, I hope others do as well!

Thanks,   Wikipelli Talk   10:49, 15 May 2012 (UTC)


 * comment: There were comments left on the article's talk page, which I appreciate greatly! I'd be very pleased to have any other comments as well! Thanks!   Wikipelli Talk   12:57, 30 May 2012 (UTC)

Comments
 * Lead seems a little heavy, four paras for a short article, check out WP:LEAD.
 * "existed longer and more successfully than any other American utopian group.[1]" some claim. You source it to one book.  Is there any other evidence that this claim is true?
 * Re: the first two bullets: I've reduced the lede to 2 paras. Started a section at the end (don't like the name, though, "Success of the society" Suggestions?  I'd like a 'post-mortem'-like section where the success in retrospect could be examined.   Wikipelli  Talk   17:35, 4 June 2012 (UTC)


 * On a vaguely related note, I don't see refs in the lead in most FAs these days, they tend to expand upon the lead in the main part of the article and ref stuff there.
 * I agree. I prefer not to have refs in the lede. Took them out except one since there was a direct quote. I felt uneasy taking that one out.   Wikipelli Talk   17:35, 4 June 2012 (UTC)
 * Direct quote must be cited per WP:LEADCITE


 * Not sure soul needs to be linked.
 * Unlinked   Wikipelli Talk   17:35, 4 June 2012 (UTC)


 * "The Ottawa Free Trader -. 27 November 1908" odd space/hyphen combo here.
 * typo   Wikipelli  Talk   17:35, 4 June 2012 (UTC)


 * Shouldn't the further reading work titles be in italics?
 * will check and fix   Wikipelli Talk   17:35, 4 June 2012 (UTC)


 * "Full text at Internet Archive (archive.org)" well that's why we have  as part of our cite web template, so fix that.
 * Checking on that, too...   Wikipelli Talk   17:35, 4 June 2012 (UTC)

The Rambling Man (talk) 18:50, 2 June 2012 (UTC)
 * Thanks so much for the input! I appreciate it...   Wikipelli  Talk   21:07, 2 June 2012 (UTC)