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Spiritual density
This is a long and detailed article about a subject in theosophy, and mainly the hard work of a single editor. It may benefit from an in-depth review. &#8227; &#5339;&#5505;  [ &#5200; ] 02:40, 20 September 2005 (UTC)


 * The article lacks references, and in many instances reads as an essay and WP:NOR. As it stands, the article deserves a Cleanup tag. &asymp; jossi &asymp; 23:23, 20 September 2005 (UTC)
 * I second Jossi's concerns. Let me give an example.  There's a discussion of Leary's model in the article which definitely sounds like original research.  Has anyone else, ever, made that comparison?  If so, did they come to the conclusions presented in the article?  If so, cite them.  Otherwise, it's not verifiable.  Best of luck.  Jkelly 04:30, 3 October 2005 (UTC)
 * I agree about the original research. The concept of different levels of spiritual attainment/existence is a valid topic: it's a recurring theme in various religious contexts. But there are a number of pages that tackle this already - for instance, Subtle body, Septenary (Theosophy) and Plane (cosmology) - from an objective and comparative basis. Spiritual density, however, seems to be expounding a largely unsupported personal take on the subject. Tearlach 13:37, 9 October 2005 (UTC)