Wikipedia:Peer review/Stone Town/archive1

Stone Town
I've listed this article for peer review because this is an Iconic part of our nations history and I believe this article should be able to achieve good article status. I am mainly concerned about the Landmarks Section. It seemed that it was like a guide and I tried to touch up a little. There were way too many land marks on there and I made a separate article List of Landmarks in Stone Town and moved most of them there. However, I am still not sure about the language style in that section.

Furthermore, with regards to the geography section. Should the Climate section fall under geography? Also I personally did not write the 3 sentences under the geography section but I am unsure as how to expand it, if I wanted to.

Moreover, any other help and advice that would lead this article to become a good article would be much appreciated.

Thanks, Sputink (talk) 20:49, 4 January 2016 (UTC)

Review by Fritzmann2002
This is my first review, but I'd like to devote my time to a thorough review of this article, and I look forward to working with you, Sputnik. I'll write what I find in a bulleted list, you can respond using a colon on the line after each point. Don't worry about signing your name, but start every response with User:Fritzmann2002 so I can be notified that you responded. Thanks!
 * Thank you for your time and help, Applogies for not getting back earlier I did not receive a notification. Sputink (talk) 20:51, 19 January 2016 (UTC)

Lead

 * In the second sentence, the part in parentheses should be moved into the first sentence; it should not be its own sentence
 * "it retained its importance as the main city of Zanzibar during the period of the British protectorate" may need to be rewritten. It is hard to understand the first, and even the second, time reading it
 * "Stone Town is a city of prominent historical and artistic importance in East Africa" This has already been stated many times. A different lead sentence is needed for this paragraph
 * The third paragraph needs more to it. In fact, if you can't find any more to complete it, you could probably easily integrate it later in the article.
 * The Infobox needs other information besides the UNESCO World Heritage Site info. You could probably add another infobox below that one with that info
 * User:Fritzmann2002 - What kind of infobox would you mean, Stone town despite the name is not a town nor a district. Do not believe any other infobox would fit in.

Overview

 * In the second sentence, bicycles and motorbikes do not need to be wiki linked

More to come very soon