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Strasbourg
An article with a real potential and a lot of nice pictures. RCS 11:21, 25 April 2007 (UTC)

Review by Karanacs
Overall I think this article is well-written, and illustrated very well. I would rate it as a B-Class article. I do see some room for improvement.
 * It is unlikely this can be rated GA status unless you add inline citations.
 * "summer temperatures can be inordinately high." - how high is inordinately?
 * "one of the most atmospherically polluted cities of France, although the progressive disappearance of heavy industry as well as effective measures of traffic regulation in and around the city are showing encouraging results" - how much of a decrease has been recorded/is being seen?
 * Is the pollution caused solely by things happening in Strasbourg? Since it is on the border, is any of the pollution coming from Germany? (we have this problem in Texas, where pollution sometimes drifts from Mexico)
 * History Section
 * Need to separate the history section into subsections -- it is a little long for a single section.
 * The first paragraph in the history section does not read very smoothly for me.
 * You use the name "Stratisburgum" in paragraph two, but don't mention how the name changed from "Argentoratum" in paragraph 1, although "Stratisburgum" is mentioned in pargraph 3 as a name used in a later century by the Alemanni -- did they rename it?
 * Did Gottfried von Stasburg live in Strabourg? It is not entirely clear (although the name would imply that he did).
 * In many places, the article needs better transitions between facts within a paragraph.
 * One paragraph mentions both the Strasbourg Cathedral and the city's printing industry with little transition.
 * Better transition between composition of La Marseillaise and the French revolution (for people not familiar with La M.)
 * Work on transitions in WWII paragraph
 * Last three paragraphs of History section all begin with "In "
 * I would remove the galleries of pictures. The article has a lot of beautiful photos placed appropriately in the text, and does not need an additional gallery.
 * Is it necessary to list the notable streets or squares? Unless there is something particularly notable about them (other than they originate in a certain time period), I would leave out those lists.
 * "is the most spectacular" - weasel words -- what is "spectacular" about it?
 * Instead of a list of museums, could the article instead focus on a select few of them that are especially important for various reasons?
 * There are a lot of red links in the article -- these will need to be taken care of before the article reaches GA.
 * Can you prosify the culture section?
 * Many reviewers for GA and FA articles detest Trivia sections. You might want to transfer it into a Popular Culture section and prosify it (or consider removing the trivia).
 * Why was Strasbourg chosen to be the seat of so many European things? You might include information about that in the European Role section.
 * Is there any speculation on what changes might occur as Strasbourg becomes a part of the new Eurodistrict?

Great job so far! I think with a little bit of work, especially with citations, this will pass the GA review and has a shot at becoming a featured article. Karanacs 15:47, 2 May 2007 (UTC)


 * Please see automated peer review suggestions here. Thanks, Ruhrfisch 03:37, 7 May 2007 (UTC)