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===SummerSlam (1988)===

This peer review discussion has been closed. I've listed this article for peer review because I want some really good comments on how to improve the article in an effort to get it to GA and maybe FA status. This is the first article of this nature that I have written, so I would like some comments from people who usually write PPVs to make sure I including everything. I would also like some comments from non-wrestling fans. Is the article well-written? Is it accessible to non-fans? Is everything adequately explained?

Thanks, Nikki  311  23:03, 22 April 2008 (UTC)

It is still open and located at Peer review/SummerSlam (1988)/archive1.

Ruhrfisch comments: Here are some suggestions to help improve the article to GA status.
 * A model article is often useful for ideas and to follow (style, structure, etc.). I note that the 1993, 1994, and 2007 Summer Slams are all Good Articles and would make nice models.
 * Thanks Nikki  311  23:49, 26 April 2008 (UTC)


 * The article is generally well written but has a few awkward sentences such as Because he no longer had a challenger for his title, The Honky Tonk Man claimed that he did not care who he opposed.[4] and could use a copyedit.
 * Done Nikki  311  17:48, 2 May 2008 (UTC)


 * My understanding is that all WWF events are scripted, so the article might want to make this clearer. See WP:IN-U
 * Done (I think) Nikki  311  17:48, 2 May 2008 (UTC)


 * Also be careful to avoid jargon and provide context for the reader - for example, although DDT is wikilinked, perhaps explaining it briefly in When Roberts attempted a DDT, Hercules was able to escape ... would make it clearer.
 * Explained the purpose or outcome of the moves in the text. Nikki  311  01:09, 29 April 2008 (UTC)


 * This sentence seems to missing a word The following [?] was a rematch between Dino Bravo, accompanied by Frenchy Martin, and Don Muraco of their WrestleMania IV matchup.[3] or perhaps The sixth event was a rematch...?
 * Done Nikki  311  23:49, 26 April 2008 (UTC)


 * Is it wrestling style to abbreviate "with" as "w/"?
 * Fixed Nikki  311  23:49, 26 April 2008 (UTC)


 * Since some wrestlers are seen as good or bad (crowd favorites or villains) should this information be given?
 * Explained, but only when it mattered to the storylines. Nikki  311  17:48, 2 May 2008 (UTC)


 * This could use some history of the development of Summer Slam. Since this was the very first Summer Slam, who came up with the idea? What were the ratings like? What was the critical reception if any (obviously a success, as it has been repeated since)?
 * Honestly, I don't think much has been written about the development of SummerSlam (at least not nearly as much as say WrestleMania or the [[Royal Rumble), but I'll do some more research to see what I can find. Nikki  311  17:48, 2 May 2008 (UTC)

I hope this helps - sorry not to have more ideas, you might want to ask at WP:PRV for more reviewers, or at the WikiProject for Wrestling or maybe ask one of the authors of the other SummerSlam GAs. Ruhrfisch &gt;&lt;&gt; &deg; &deg; 17:13, 26 April 2008 (UTC)
 * Good suggestion I've asked a few people to drop by and comment. Nikki  311  23:49, 26 April 2008 (UTC)
 * Thank you so much! That was very helpful. I'll start working on your suggestions later today. Nikki  311  18:14, 26 April 2008 (UTC)

Comments from

 * In the sentence "He was originally supposed to defend his championship against Brutus Beefcake, but he was unable to compete because of an injury caused by Ron Bass before the event.", "because of" could be changed to "due to." My grammar teacher used to beef on me because of that.
 * Done --  ThinkBlue  (Hit BLUE) 22:44, 26 April 2008 (UTC)


 * "Honky Tonk Man ... did not care who" → "did not care whom", another thing I got beefed about.
 * Done --  ThinkBlue  (Hit BLUE) 22:42, 26 April 2008 (UTC)


 * "using steel chairs on one another..." This provoked laughter somehow...no offense. :-) Try elaborating on how they used the steel chairs. Banging? Breaking each other's necks?
 * Clarified all I know is they hit each other with them, but I'm not sure where so I left that part out. Nikki  311  03:32, 27 April 2008 (UTC)


 * I completely agree with Ruhrfisch on that last comment; although it's entertaining to watch the action through the text, some tidbits on the origin of the SummerSlam would help.
 * I'll do some more research and see what I can come up with. Nikki  311  20:16, 27 April 2008 (UTC)

Otherwise...not too bad, although the wrestling antics are quite laughable. ;-) -- La Pianísta!  22:33, 26 April 2008 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the comments. I'll get right on these. Also, no offense taken. :) Nikki  311  00:59, 27 April 2008 (UTC)


 * Comments from
 * You need a specific fair use rationale for the image in the infobox.
 * Done Nikki  311  20:16, 27 April 2008 (UTC)


 * Consistency in link "The" into team names is needed.
 * Done Nikki  311  20:12, 27 April 2008 (UTC)


 * There's referencing then there's overreferencing - do you really need four citations for the single sentence "Hogan and Savage won the match after Miss Elizabeth, Savage's wife and manager, distracted the referee by removing her skirt to reveal her underwear."?
 * Done Nikki  311  18:15, 28 April 2008 (UTC)


 * No need to continually use the same reference on consecutive sentences, e.g. you use ref [1] on 16 consecutive sentences. Just once at the end of each paragraph, or before another reference is relevant.
 * Done Nikki  311  18:15, 28 April 2008 (UTC)


 * page numbers in references don't need to be in parentheses.
 * Removed Nikki  311  14:35, 28 April 2008 (UTC)

That's about it from me. The Rambling Man (talk) 16:32, 27 April 2008 (UTC)
 * Thanks. Nikki  311  20:12, 27 April 2008 (UTC)