Wikipedia:Peer review/Sunderland/archive2

Sunderland
Needs seriously pumping up in a few ways for the CD version of wikipedia, I need major help on this, and I can't have this peer review ignored. Alphablast 17:12, 26 May 2007 (UTC)
 * Nomination came from now blocked sockpuppet of User:Molag Bal. Martinp23 19:39, 27 May 2007 (UTC)


 * Some points to consider:
 * Typically the history section comes first, followed by the geography section.
 * This has a large table of contents.
 * Add footnotes to sources for "On average, it is around 80 metres above sea level." and "The University of Sunderland...currently has over 16,000 students."
 * I would merge the "Civic history" sub-section into the "History" section.
 * Remove external links from the body of the article, like "See the full list of victims", just use footnotes.
 * A map of those wards in the "Demographics" section would make it a lot easier to understand.
 * Add information on what services the local government provides, (ie. drinking water, sewage, hospital, police, etc?)
 * The area that could use the most improvement is getting rid of one-sentence paragraphs, there are currently two of these in the lead section, and several throughout the article. --maclean 19:48, 26 May 2007 (UTC)