Wikipedia:Peer review/Syracuse, New York/archive1

Syracuse, New York
I've been working on this article over a year now, and I've probably contributed around 80% of the non-robot content. The problem is I'm lost now on what I should do to organize this article better. I've been looking at some other city articles to get some ideas, but what troubles me a lot is what to add to the table of contents and what can somehow be condensed so it's not so overly long. I just would like to ask what you all think the top priorities of this article should be. Thanks a lot! Unfortunately there aren't exactly 100 interested editors like for New York City! -newkai | talk | contribs July 5, 2005 16:30 (UTC)
 * Good work, but some improvements could still be made. City articles have a bad tendency to accumulate a lot of lists, but in general it is bad form to mix lists into articles. Reducing the list would thus be one improvement. Some like ==List of famous Syracusans== could be moved to their own articles, other like ==Sites of interest== and ==Museums and libraries== could be merged. The lead image (Image:Syracuse.jpg) is both ugly and unlikely to actually be fair use. It should be easy for anyone with a digital camera to get a free one. In terms of content what you have seems quite good. It would be nice to see something on arts and culture. The lead should also be somewhat longer. - SimonP July 6, 2005 00:42 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the advice. I'm going to try to move the non-list stuff above the list stuff... Should make it look better. I've started writing about arts and culture, and merged the ==Sites of interest== and ==Museums and libraries==. I'm pondering what I should do with the lead image... Maybe I'll use the hill photo I have further down in the article. I actually have a photo from about the same spot in that square, as I had already intended to replace it, but it didn't come out that great... I'll think about it! I'll look around at what could be put in the lead... Maybe some ultra-quick history like the Erie Canal and later railroads basically causing it to exist! Thanks a lot for your help! -newkai | talk | contribs July 6, 2005 11:43 (UTC)
 * Looks better than my city page, Burbank, CA, good job...you seem to have all your ducks in a row. I don't know anything about Syracuse so i can't really comment on content however I prefer having everything handy in an info box if i just need to get some information quickly and without having to scroll down and to find out who the mayor is or what area code i need to dial. - Seasee 6 July 2005 19:37 (UTC)

I hope you were looking at the city Featured Articles for ideas instead of developing city ones. =Nichalp  «Talk»=  July 8, 2005 09:09 (UTC)
 * Both featured article ones and other pretty fat, full, and chunky ones. -newkai | talk | contribs July 8, 2005 13:55 (UTC)
 * How about some of the India-related FA's I've written: Mumbai, Gangtok and Kalimpong. Would they be of any help? =Nichalp   «Talk»=  July 8, 2005 16:38 (UTC)
 * Wow, those are great. Writing about the climate is a great idea, especially with Syracuse's crazy winters. I'll do that next. -newkai | talk | contribs