Wikipedia:Peer review/TRAPPIST-1/archive1

TRAPPIST-1


I've listed this article for peer review because I just did a major expansion on the article and wanted to get second opinions on whether the new version is OK to people. I was also thinking of sending this article to FAC or GAN [after some cleanup] but I have never written an astronomy article before so I'd like to get some assistance from editors with experience in that field.

Thanks, Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 17:20, 16 November 2021 (UTC)

Comments by CactiStaccingCrane (talk)

 * TRAPPIST-1: The star should be Star only; Potential atmospheres should be Planet atmospheres
 * Did the first, went with "of the planets" for the second since stars also have atmospheres. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 13:48, 22 December 2021 (UTC)
 * Kepler should never be italicized
 * Deitalicized. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 13:48, 22 December 2021 (UTC)
 * Notes should be incorporated to the article. I like the idea of explaining words this way, but usually a wikilink is suffice.
 * In some places (the Featured article process) folks will want more than a link to explain what an article's jargon means. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 13:48, 22 December 2021 (UTC)
 * External links should be cleaned up
 * Did some cleanup. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 13:48, 22 December 2021 (UTC)
 * My suggestion is to break up the paragraph. It would look like a wall of text on mobile, and is just unpleasant. I also suggest consise writing. Example:




 * Intense extreme ultraviolet and X-rays can make water escape from planets, by splitting and heating into hydrogen along with oxygen gas.
 * That's done. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 13:48, 22 December 2021 (UTC)


 * Three or four planets – e, f, and g or d, e, and f – are located inside the habitable zone. should not be bolded. Bolding only used for the title in the text.
 * Hmm, I think highlighting the names of the planets is probably better here. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 13:48, 22 December 2021 (UTC)
 * Gallery images should be get rid of, adding more images to illustrate the sections would be better
 * Moved one image and one video up. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 13:48, 22 December 2021 (UTC)

Courtesy ping: -- CactiStaccingCrane (talk) 08:24, 22 December 2021 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the comments, Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 13:48, 22 December 2021 (UTC)
 * Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 13:49, 22 December 2021 (UTC)
 * Nice work on Trappist-1! If you'd like, you can comment on SpaceX Starship peer review as well, where you can find extra aspects of the article that is missing. CactiStaccingCrane (talk) 13:54, 22 December 2021 (UTC)
 * Put a comment in. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 16:03, 22 December 2021 (UTC)