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TS-19
This peer review discussion has been closed. This article has reached GA status not too long ago, and I would like to nominate to FA status eventually. I have become more confident with my prose, but I'm still a little iffy as to whether it meets the featured article criteria. I would like some feedback on the current state of the article, and some suggestions on how to improve it.

Thanks, —DAP388 (talk) 17:49, 27 May 2012 (UTC)

Comments The Rambling Man (talk) 17:07, 6 June 2012 (UTC)
 * " the group finally " who's "the group"? For this to standalone as an FA, we need to understand what "the group" means.
 * Any reason why "Daryl Dixon" is redlinked in the infobox?
 * "and a 3.4 rating in" as a Brit, I have no idea whatsoever what that means.
 * "highest-rated telecast in its first season." context? In the US?
 * "walkers" you need to explain the zombie apocalypse you mention in the lead is directly relevant to the word "walker".
 * "which Rick agrees to" -> "to which Rick agrees."
 * "such as showers and wine," -> "such as taking showers and drinking wine..."
 * Not sure we really need to link "suicide" or "rape" in an article in English Wikipedia, pretty common terms.
 * "but is unsuccessful" perhaps just me but it's an odd turn of phrase when referring to a failed rape attempt.
 * " to 8 hours after" eight.
 * "if it can't power" avoid contractions.
 * Don't force image sizes (other than lead images), so portrait images should be  and landscape should be   only.
 * Don't think you need "pictured" in an image caption.
 * " ultimately explodes shortly thereafter" either ultimately or shortly thereafter, both not required.
 * "The opening and concluding scenes of "TS-19" are reminiscent..." maybe note that "It has been noted that.." or similar since you're stating a kind of opinion here.
 * Apparently New York Daily News is actually just Daily News (from New York)...
 * Time Inc. has no comma.
 * Wall Street Journal has a The included.
 * Check ref titles meet WP:DASH.