Wikipedia:Peer review/Taiwanese aborigines/archive1

Taiwanese aborigines

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 * The article is pretty long. It's the product of a large amount of hard work, esp. by Maowang and myself, but also by countless others. It is currently a GA nominee and we hope to send it to FAC after that...--Ling.Nut 03:38, 27 March 2007 (UTC)

JHMM13
This is a great article, and I commend you for it. My suggestions: That's the best I can tell you. I'm not saying that it should be shorter because the subject is not worthy of a long article, but in the interest of user attention spans, we should try to keep things to a relative minimum that goes into a reasonable amount of detail without overdoing it. Review your article here and ask yourself if someone is absolutely necessary to note in the article or if the user can find said semantics in the book that is referenced.  JHMM13  08:30, 27 March 2007 (UTC)
 * I must admit that I cannot sit through all of it and that is going to be a problem at FAC, I'm sure of it. There are some sections with 7 full paragraphs that make this drag on for a long time. You might want to try to take sections that are important enough and bring that over to another article that covers the topic fully while the section in this article can be brought to more of a summarization.
 * I'm not sure if it's required at FAC yet, but you'll be saving yourself and everyone else a lot of trouble by switching over to footnote referencing. This will also make the main section of your shorter, flow better, and be less cluttered. I can't think of an article recently that has been promoted to FA status using Harvard referencing. (p.s. it's not hard to switch over!)
 * Having a lot of red links in your article is not too fashionable over at FAC, but it's not required. Just a suggestion to create those articles instead of unlinking them.
 * Thanks! (note left on reviewer's talk page...) --Ling.Nut 11:08, 27 March 2007 (UTC)

Deckiller
Just a few random comments: &mdash; Deckiller 08:04, 9 April 2007 (UTC)
 * Bulleted lists might get hammered at FAC; try integrating them into the prose if possible.
 * The images are somewhat large; 200-250px might be better.
 * Harvard referencing is uncommon on Wikipedia, since it's easy to jump right to the sources. People might disagree with this referencing style at FAC.
 * The prose is nice IMO, but it needs a run-through by two or three editors to remove lingering issues. Like I said, I'm somewhat backlogged; I don't know if I can help in that department.

"There is also recorded oral histories that recall some Plains aborigines were sometimes captured and killed by highlands tribes while relocating through the mountains (see the Atayal narrative "Headhunting" in the Formosan Language Archive)." This includes an external jump which should probably be reformatted as a citation. -Fsotrain09 00:07, 14 April 2007 (UTC)