Wikipedia:Peer review/Tara Conner/archive2

Tara Conner
I put this up for review in December but got only one response... cleared up everything from that and have waited until the article has settled down again. I'm basically looking for any suggestions on how to improve the standard of the article so I could possibly get it up to Good Article or Featured Article status. -- PageantUpdater  •  talk  |  contribs  |  esperanza  21:32, 5 February 2007 (UTC)

Trebor
It's good, but needs a bit of tidying. Trebor 23:00, 5 February 2007 (UTC)
 * Wikilink full dates in the references (and everywhere else) for date preferences to work.
 * When there are different facts using the same reference, they should go to the same footnote. Name the footnote and cite it afterwards (see WP:FOOTNOTE for more).
 * The prose needs a fair bit of work. Merge out the stubby one or two sentence paragraphs into more flowing prose; watch out for overuse of the passive voice; proofread the article, for instance Deal or No Deal is italicised in the image caption but not in the text.
 * Sort out the ref spacing. They come straight after the punctuation with no space; there should also be no space between multiple refs for one sentence.
 * Thanks, have worked on the references and tidied them up per your suggestions - took a bit of figuring out but got it to work!. Have also worked on the prose and proofreading. Can you please give me some examples of overuse of the passive voice? --  PageantUpdater  •  talk  |  contribs  |  esperanza  23:40, 5 February 2007 (UTC)
 * Do a search through the article for use of "was" and if it's possible to rephrase, it's normally stronger. For instance, "This was neither confirmed nor denied by the Miss Universe Organization" is better as "The Miss Universe Organization neither confirmed nor denied this." Trebor 08:25, 6 February 2007 (UTC)


 * Please see automated peer review suggestions here. Thanks, APR t 23:06, 5 February 2007 (UTC)