Wikipedia:Peer review/The Extreme Sport Challenges Association/archive1

The Extreme Sport Challenges Association
This peer review discussion has been closed. I've listed this article for peer review because the no one seems to be reviewing it, so hopefully someone out there could review my article. It would be much appreciated, thank you so much.

Thanks, The Extreme Sport Challenges (talk) 15:43, 6 December 2013 (UTC)

Comments by Neonchameleon

 * First things first, your reference titles are preventing me from finding information. When I mouseover I want to see what I'm getting - give me the article title rather than just the website name please?


 * At least one of your links (YOPEY) is broken.


 * You've clearly put a lot of work in to that page and there's a lot of useful information on there - but it's not very wikified, and some of it is outside the scope of the page itself - for example Cancer Research UK has its own page and a discussion of what they do that's more than a sentence belongs there.


 * It feels like an advocacy puff-piece and needs re-writing for a neutral point of view; from your username I suspect a Conflict of Interest. I hope some of that helped?