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The Game (film)
This peer review discussion has been closed. I've listed this article for peer review because a lot of work has gone into this article I would like any comments or suggestions that would help it get promoted to GA status.

Thanks, J.D. (talk) 14:34, 18 August 2010 (UTC)


 * Comments by Jappalang


 * Dablinks (toolbox on right) shows the Scrooge link as a disambiguation; please fix it.
 * Checklinks shows http://www.rollingstone.com/reviews/movie/5948705/review/5948706/the_game as a dead link; please fix as well.

Plot
 * "he remains haunted by seeing his father commit suicide on his 48th birthday by jumping off the roof of the family's home"
 * Not really sure what to make of this sentence. How about "he is haunted by the imagery of his father's suicide, which he witnessed."


 * "Nicholas finds the game is real, which starts to put his business, reputation, finances, and safety at risk."
 * How?


 * "... and also comes under risk."
 * Like?


 * "... and fire upon them."
 * With what? I know what "fire upon" means but I suspect it is a slang term (for firearm-related action) that is unlikely encyclopaedic.  Also note the sudden incongruity of having game company employees shoot people; is there a better way to segue this information into the plot?


 * "... until he learns the truth."
 * What truth? Is it really the truth?  Or do you mean "until she tells him the truth behind the game."


 * "Christine realizes that Nicholas' gun is not a prop, as CRS was unaware of its presence."
 * Does this sentence matter in the scheme of the whole summary?

Production
 * "The Game began as a spec screenplay, ..."
 * What is a spec screenplay


 * "... who put the project in turnaround, ..."
 * What does that mean?


 * "Fincher intended to make The Game before Seven but when Brad Pitt became available that project took priority."
 * I believe this can be ambiguous: "that project" refers to which? Can this sentence be rephrased as well?  How was Pitt's availability a factor in prioritising Seven?


 * "However, the actress had a scheduling conflict with the Robert Zemeckis film Contact and could not appear in The Game."
 * The first part of the sentence suggest she would not join Contact, I think this should be rephrased, like "However, the actress was about to act in Robert Zemeckis' Contact and could not fit The Game into her schedule."


 * "Deborah Kara Unger's auditioned for the role of Christine with test reel consisting of a two-minute sex scene from David Cronenberg's Crash."
 * Something is wrong with this sentence (possessives and noun-gerund constructs).


 * "... once Nicholas' left his protective world, ..."
 * Again the possessives...


 * "... known as ENR ..."
 * Any way to get the full terminology than just presenting it as an acronym? Is there a Wikipedia article on this?  Is there some reliable source that explains what this is?


 * "The scene where Nicholas' taxi drives into the San Francisco Bay was shot near the Embarcadero with the close-up of Douglas trapped in the back seat filmed on a soundstage at Sony Pictures studio in a large tank of water."
 * I think this is a run-on sentence, which can be effectively split into two.

Reception
 * Effectively, it comprises a paragraph and two separate sentences... and the paragraph is mainly quotes. I would prefer a more thematic reception where key points of the reviewers are grouped.

Images
 * File:TheGame poster323.jpg
 * Was this image self-taken or from a website? Refer to WP:CITE for image source requirements.  Furthermore, "This is a promotional poster for the movie this article describes" is a bit bare for a fair use rationale (the standard boilerplate 10-pointer is not much better).  Consider beefing it up.

I am not certain but I get left with a feeling that there might be more to this film than what we have. Perhaps there is simply not enough information covered by reliable sources, but I think currently the article give a slightly more than bare bones feel. This might be unresolvable (and thus moot) if there are no more reliable sources that cover this film. Jappalang (talk) 01:16, 28 August 2010 (UTC)
 * Thanks for all of your hard work! There isn't much more reliable sources that I could find. Hopefully, the long-rumored special edition DVD that the Criterion Collection might do will have substantial extras that will shed more light on this film.--J.D. (talk) 19:11, 30 August 2010 (UTC)