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The Guardian Legend
I'm nominating this article for a peer review for the same rationale as that with Zanac a while back. As with that one, this article I feel has come a long way from what it used to be. All trivia was removed, I added as many citations and references as I could, and I added much more in-depth information about the game, while at the same time, not making it sound like a strategy guide of any sort (which was what the previous version of this article looked like). Some comments


 * Since the plot description was very short, I incorporated it into the Gameplay section.


 * I acknowledge that the Development and Reception sections are rather short and may need expansion (I noted that in the article); however, with the level of obscurity with this game, people may not find too much more about the development and reception of this game.


 * I'd like to focus on the quality of the lead, but other than that, I want to see if I'm at least going in the right direction in improving this article in general. MuZemike (talk) 20:48, 18 June 2008 (UTC)

Generally a decent article considering the age of the game, especially for "Gameplay". Ashnard Talk  Contribs  06:37, 23 June 2008 (UTC)
 * Ashnard comments:
 * "in Japan for the Famicom in 1988, in North America for the Nintendo Entertainment System in 1989, and in Europe for the same console in 1992." Both "Nintendo Entertainment System" and "for the same console" are redundany here.
 * "The Guardian Legend is known for its music and for its combination of action-adventure and shoot 'em up elements." Improve the prose by using "renowned" instead of "known for". Needs a source.
 * "The Guardian Legend uses the similar overworld/underworld setup" Won't make sense to non-gamers. Needs to be explained or linked.
 * Change "woman as the" to "female".
 * Per WP: Lead, the lead should be a comprehensive summary of the article, so should incorporate infor relating to "Development" and "Reception".
 * "planetlike" should be hyphenated.
 * "The player takes control of the guardian in both humanoid and spaceship form." The protagonist transforms into a spaceship? Needs clarification.
 * "The Guardian Legend also features unlimited continues". Needs rewording to be non-gamer friendly.
 * You may wanter reconsider changing the subheadings to reflect the change in gaming style.
 * If captions aren't full sentences then they shouldn't have a full stop at the end.
 * The last sentence of "Development" could do with a source.
 * The first sentence of "Reception" needs a source.
 * "so it did not get the recognition that it may have deserved." Breaching NPOV here. Whole sentence needs a source.
 * MobyGames is not a reliable source as (I think) it can be edited as anyone. It really is just as worthy as having no source at all.
 * Thank you for the review. I've made some corrections and improvements based on your suggestions. MuZemike (talk) 16:45, 23 June 2008 (UTC)