Wikipedia:Peer review/The Marriages Between Zones Three, Four and Five/archive1

The Marriages Between Zones Three, Four and Five
I've listed this article for peer review because it is currently a GA and I would like to take it to FAC. I'd appreciate it if anyone has any feedback or suggestions.

Thanks, —Bruce1eetalk 14:21, 24 April 2017 (UTC) User:Bruce1ee, sorry for the delay and I will try to find some issues: Other than that the article looks in good shape. I just recommend using paraphrase quotes, something which I have often been critised. Lastly, could you check my peer review? It's Peer review/Yu Kanda/archive2. Regards,Tintor2 (talk) 22:51, 10 May 2017 (UTC)
 * The first paragraph is a bit small. Normally, the first paragraph of a novel article tends to take place in the beginning.
 * I don't understand the second sentence – what do you mean by "in the beginning"? —Bruce1eetalk 13:58, 11 May 2017 (UTC)
 * Avoid quotes in the lead and remove the reference. Try using a more generalized comment.
 * Thanks, but there is only one quote in the lead, which I'm going to leave because of its relevance. —Bruce1eetalk 13:58, 11 May 2017 (UTC)
 * The Zones introductions also seem to big for the lead (in comparing the actual zones). Can you simplify it?
 * I've simplified it a little. —Bruce1eetalk 13:58, 11 May 2017 (UTC)
 * Is it possible to expand the reception? You could also find similarities to make the prose flow more. For example "Like X reviewer, Y reviewer liked the story"
 * Good point, I'll have a look at doing that. —Bruce1eetalk 13:58, 11 May 2017 (UTC)
 * I've expanded the Reception section and also linked some of the reviews. —Bruce1eetalk 17:33, 21 May 2017 (UTC)
 * Thanks for picking up this review and the helpful suggestions. I'll have a look at the outstanding points you've raised. I'll also have a look at your peer review, but I must warn you that my knowledge of manga is effectively zero, so it'll be a review by the uninitiated :) —Bruce1eetalk 13:58, 11 May 2017 (UTC)
 * I've reduced the number of quotes and dealt with the issues you raised above. Thanks for your help. —Bruce1eetalk 17:33, 21 May 2017 (UTC)