Wikipedia:Peer review/The O.C. (season 1)/archive1

===The O.C. (season 1)===


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This peer review discussion has been closed. Hi, I'm interested in ultimately getting this list to the standard of FL, however this is my first real drive of an article, and I would appreciate any guidance and comments people have.

Many thanks, Rambo's Revenge (talk)  19:23, 14 July 2008 (UTC) :Note: Because of its length, this peer review is not transcluded. It is still open and located at Peer review/The O.C. (season 1)/archive1.
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 * You need to present a worldwide view of the subject in the lead. You discuss how well it was recieved in Australia in the reception, you should also mention at least what network it aired on there, as well as in the UK, where IIRC, it was particularly well recieved. Also include release dates for Regions 2 and 4 for the DVD.
 * Comment Agree about mentioning networks, but region 2 and 4 release dates are incorporated into DVD release, under dates for UK and Australia. Does this need repeating elsewhere? Rambo's Revenge (talk)  17:09, 15 July 2008 (UTC)
 * You could put them in the Lede, but its not necessary.
 * Done, I've added Canadian, UK, and Australia networks to the lead. I've decided not to duplice the other DVD region dates there though. Rambo's Revenge (talk)  14:43, 16 July 2008 (UTC)


 * "Taylor Handley played a much hated, obsessing Oliver Trask." Reads odd, because no other character description uses "a". Also, does "much hated" mean by other characters, or by viewers?
 * Done, I've hopefully clarified that and provided a reference to back it up. Rambo's Revenge (talk)  11:58, 16 July 2008 (UTC)


 * "Bonnie Somerville as Rachel Hoffman, a former work collegue of Sandy." Stubby
 * Comment, I've reworded slightly, will it suffice or does it a bigger change? <b style="color:#E32636;">Rambo's Revenge</b> <b style="color:#FFA500;">(talk)</b>  11:58, 16 July 2008 (UTC)


 * You need to be less biassed about its popularity, and find some articles which do this, if they exist. P.S. I know they do because I've used them myself at Degrassi: The Next Generation (season 3) (ref 27) and Degrassi: The Next Generation (season 4) (Refs 26 & 29)
 * Added more, the second lot of refs you suggest relate to the second season 2 - and that a whole new thing for a different day :), I used the first one though and included what I could find in the way of bad reviews in differenct aspects of the show to try and provide a balanced view. <b style="color:#E32636;">Rambo's Revenge</b> <b style="color:#FFA500;">(talk)</b>  17:37, 17 July 2008 (UTC)


 * See if you can find any reviews, both positive and negative from the UK
 * Comment, whilst I agree it was well recieved in the UK I couldn't find an specific reviews, and it didn't seem to get any specific awards in the UK that I could find. <b style="color:#E32636;">Rambo's Revenge</b> <b style="color:#FFA500;">(talk)</b>  17:49, 17 July 2008 (UTC)


 * Apparently, The Futon Critic isn't considered to be a WP:RS. The page doesn't load for me either so I can't tell what it is, but if it's a press release it should be available elsewhere
 * Comment, Site works for me, but I can't find an alternative source as it is not a press release. If you can get it to work can you tell me if it still needs replacing? Thanks <b style="color:#E32636;">Rambo's Revenge</b> <b style="color:#FFA500;">(talk)</b>  23:02, 16 July 2008 (UTC)


 * Refs 4 and 9 use tv.com :(
 * Comment, the only tv.com reference is now 6 (previously 4) and lists the crew. Is this any more reliable, in fact do the directors and writers even need citing seeing as they are all individually listed for episodes. <b style="color:#E32636;">Rambo's Revenge</b>  <b style="color:#FFA500;">(talk)</b>  23:02, 16 July 2008 (UTC)

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