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The Outrage (Marcus Welby)
This peer review discussion has been closed. I've listed this article for peer review because I believe that it is at or near GA status and would like anoher set of eye on it before making the nomination.

Thanks, Otto4711 (talk) 23:44, 25 September 2009 (UTC)

Brianboulton comments
 * I have looked at several TV episode GAs. This article seems broadly equivalent to these in overall quality, and I wouldn't expect there to be much of a problem in it being promoted.
 * However, I would expect there to be additional basic information in the lead. Most such articles give episode number in the series, the names of the writer and director, and the audience figures.
 * The plot section is rather short, and could be fleshed out. A longer plot section would give a better balance to the article's content, which at present is heavily skewed towards the controversy. This is unsurprising, since the controversy is clearly the most significant thing about the episode, but a more detailed plot would be an improvement.
 * In the Background section, do you really want to say "The titular Loring, a middle-aged man, suffered from high blood pressure, diabetes, alcoholism and homosexuality" rather than "The titular Loring, a middle-aged homosexual man, suffered from high blood pressure, diabetes and alcoholism"?
 * The word "zap" is slang and definitely not encyclopedic
 * Why is it necessary to list the "guest stars" separately in the infobox when there is a full cast list in the article?

There is not much more I can say. The article is well written, the references look good and there are no obvious MOS violations. I have made a few small-scale fixes myself. Brianboulton (talk) 23:57, 5 October 2009 (UTC)