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The Return of Harmony
This peer review discussion has been closed. I've listed this article for peer review because I wish for it to become a good article, and would like to find out what should be done before it can become a good article.

Thanks, Ciaran Sinclair (talk) 15:16, 11 June 2012 (UTC)


 * Comment: I know, since I was the editor who made it, that it needs more "mainstream" sources for the reception section. Unfortunately, those aren't out yet.-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)  21:49, 23 June 2012 (UTC)

Comments
 * "Part two aired the next week" the following week?
 * "received a household rating of 0.2" outside the US/Canada this is entirely meaningless I'm afraid!
 * "making it the highest episode ever broadcast..." highest episode of My Little Pony or any show?
 * " In part one of the episode..." actually you said it was two episodes, so perhaps "in the first episode of the pair" or something similar?
 * Infobox image caption needs no period.
 * Infobox caption: "center" do you mean the big one? Not actually center... would think about rephrasing this with "from top left, clockwise... " so there's no ambiguity.
 * I've changed this to "front", as the other ponies are in the background. Ciaran Sinclair (talk) 17:01, 5 July 2012 (UTC)

The Rambling Man (talk) 17:23, 2 July 2012 (UTC)
 * "The three Cutie Mark Crusaders - Apple Bloom," not a spaced hyphen, an en-dash per WP:DASH here please.
 * "to retrieve the box, however, the box is empty." -> "to retrieve the box, however, it is empty."
 * "momentary" -> "momentarily".
 * John de Lancie caption needs a period.
 * "from We Got This Covered," what is that? If it's a magazine or some kind of work, it should be in italics.
 * "A review from Republibot" if this "entity" hasn't got an article, why should we care what the review says? What is its provenance?
 * Avoid SHOUTING in the refs.
 * Check refs, are you sure they're reliable?