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The Rise and Fall of Ziggy Stardust and the Spiders from Mars


Hey all. I've listed this for PR so I could possibly get it to GA before its 50th anniversary in June. I'd appreciate some assistance with the flow (as it currently stands the concept and themes section repeats a lot of info from the songs section I added last year). I also could use some help with the influence section (there's like none currently) and possibly anything you can think of. If all goes well this will be Bowie's final '70s album to reach GA status.

Thanks, – zmbro (talk) 18:19, 31 August 2021 (UTC)

Comments from Realmaxxver
Going to be making some comments soon. Realmaxxver (talk) 15:08, 7 October 2021 (UTC)

Realmaxxver (talk) 09:15, 9 October 2021 (UTC)

Lead

 * "It was produced by Bowie and Ken Scott and features Bowie's backing band the Spiders from Mars — Mick Ronson, Trevor Bolder and Mick Woodmansey." → " It was produced by Bowie and Ken Scott and features Bowie's backing band the Spiders from Mars, which at the time consisted Mick Ronson, Trevor Bolder and Mick Woodmansey."
 * Changed to "comprising..." because the Spiders only ever had one lineup so saying "at the time" makes it imply there were other members.
 * "Most of the songs were written around the same time as its predecessor Hunky Dory." → "Most of the songs were written around the same time as Bowie's previous album Hunky Dory." – Done
 * "Ziggy Stardust concerns Bowie's titular alter ego Ziggy Stardust, a fictional androgynous, bisexual rock star who is sent to Earth as a savior before an impending apocalyptic disaster." → "Ziggy Stardust concerns Bowie's titular alter ego Ziggy Stardust, a fictional androgynous and bisexual rock star who is sent to Earth as a savior before an impending apocalyptic disaster." – Done
 * Thanks for comments. Changes made. – zmbro (talk) 21:37, 10 October 2021 (UTC)