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The Trial of a Time Lord

 * A script has been used to generate a semi-automated review of the article for issues relating to grammar and house style; it can be found on the automated peer review page for July 2008.
 * A script has been used to generate a semi-automated review of the article for issues relating to grammar and house style; it can be found on the automated peer review page for July 2008.

This peer review discussion has been closed. I've listed this article for peer review because I want suggestions on how to improve the prose; I feel this is the best place for it, as the LOCE backlog is huge.

Thanks, Sceptre (talk) 22:04, 8 July 2008 (UTC) If you'd like additional comments, please respond here! MeegsC | Talk 20:21, 13 July 2008 (UTC) You really should answer those questions in the article, not here! If I had those questions, so will many other readers... MeegsC | Talk 20:12, 17 July 2008 (UTC)
 * Comments from MeegsC
 * His [Holmes's] death was one of many problems encountered during the writing of the final segment; ... You only mention one other; does that really qualify as "many"?
 * Christopher H. Bidmead and PJ Hammond were asked to write, but both Saward and Nathan-Turner disliked their scripts. Who asked them to write it then?
 * I found the section on the writing of the serial a little confusing, mostly because it jumped back and forth a bit from segment to segment. Were these all being written at the same time?  Were consecutive segments based on previous ones (thus needing to wait until the previous ones were completed)?  Did the authors work together at all?  Who chose the writers, and why were some chosen that didn't have the approval of so many important people?  Things like that could be made clearer.
 * For the opening sequence, Nathan-Turner commissioned a 45-second model sequence that cost £8,000. Was that an unusual amount for that time?  (Doesn't sound like much today!)  What was the opening sequence; why did it cost so much?
 * Terror of the Vervoids and Time Inc. were produced together with the production code 7C. Is the production code significant?  If not, I'd remove it.  If so, is there a reason why the production codes for the other segments aren't included?
 * Changed to "several"
 * They're known writers, but JNT and Saward didn't like the submission
 * I think they were written around the same time.
 * Inflation. I think that would've been half the show's budget.
 * Removed. Sceptre (talk) 20:28, 13 July 2008 (UTC)