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The Waterboys
I am nominating this article to peer review after spending a couple of weeks working on it. I am especially interested in comments from people who are not familiar with the group. Is the article interesting? Does it do its job of comprehensively explaining The Waterboys without getting into trivia? I am hoping to take the article to WP:FA after receiving your feedback. Jkelly 07:13, 4 November 2005 (UTC)


 * Update -- User:Hoary, User:FuriousFreddy and User:Mel Etitis have all made some improvements. I'm still hoping for more feedback.  Jkelly 18:04, 6 November 2005 (UTC)


 * I never heard of The Waterboys, nor am I a fan of music. Here are my one-liners...The opening doesn't mention where they are from, but it says "Celtic folk music" so that means Ireland right? The third reference doesn't mention the World Party, and the fourth doesn't mention Steven Harwell. Might be best to mention in the citation of reference 5 that it is referring to page three. I don't think the info targeted for reference 5 or the first two reference 6s need be referenced, but I guess it can't hurt. Is "Top Forty" really capitalized, or is that a proper name for some radio program...not a music fan, remember. The first sentence in "Late 80s" section is confusing. I think you mean to say "where he", not "and". Perhaps move reference 8 upto the first claim of people calling them "Raggle Taggle". Nice use of google books. In "The end and return of the Waterboys", probably shouldn't start a sentence with a number. What, no references for the "Music" section opener? "fantasist" is a word? Probably shouldn't place it next to the word "Christian" as it looks too similar to 'fanatic', that is just asking for trouble on an anyone-can-edit page. The first music bit didn't work for me, but I got the second. In "Discography" what does "are known for both their concerts and their studio recordings" supposed to mean? Don't all bands do that? Just a prefence thing, but I wouldn't mention other bands in the "Discography", it may confuse the reader.  --maclean25 02:39, 17 November 2005 (UTC)
 * I did a preliminary run-through to address some of the comments. The "no mention of where they are from in the lead" is exactly the kind of thing that I or another fan would miss, and many of your other comments were very helpful.  I think "Top Forty" is typically capitalized as a proper noun.  "Fantasist" is a word, and I think the danger of it being misread (or edited into) "fanatic" is worth it, because its the best word for Lewis' writing.  I'll go looking for the missing references you spotted.  Thanks so much!  Jkelly 03:24, 17 November 2005 (UTC)
 * Forgot to mention this, the captions on the images can be more descriptive. For example, the first one shows the band, but I would like to know which person is Mike Scott, and who are the rest of the people, on drums, on guitar? Same with the cover of the "The Big Music" single. --maclean25 06:14, 17 November 2005 (UTC)


 * I think I got rid of the unreferenced items you spotted, and removed the "known for both..." line. Other stylistic concerns have also been addressed.  I've also expanded the captions.  Thanks very much for all of the helpful comments.  Jkelly 04:52, 22 November 2005 (UTC)


 * Excellent article! I think it's ready for FAC. Tuf-Kat 06:18, 1 December 2005 (UTC)