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The Who by Numbers Tour

 * Previous peer review

I've listed this article for peer review because I want to know how I could improve this article to FA status.

Thanks, Chrisnait (talk &#124; contribs) 16:43, 14 July 2020 (UTC)

Lead
 * "It consisted of concerts split between North America and Europe, beginning on 3 October 1975 at Bingley Hall in Stafford, England and ending on 21 October 1976 at Maple Leaf Gardens in Toronto, Canada." → It began on 3 October 1975, ended on 21 October 1976 and consisted of concerts split between North America and Europe." ✅


 * "The Who's drummer Keith Moon played his last concerts with the band during the tour; he died less than two years after its conclusion." Remove this keep the later mention ✅


 * "The band began with a European leg, which introduced a laser lighting display, and a North American leg followed. The leg set indoor concert attendance records" → The [Tour] began with a European leg, which introduced a laser lighting display. A North American leg followed and set indoor concert attendance records. The Who returned to America in 1976 after playing four shows in Europe... ✅

Background


 * I would recommend the inclusion of a picture of one of the venues performed, per your discretion. Where possible try to include both interior and exterior shots. ✅


 * Once again per your discretion but I feel the detail surrounding the events relating moon distinct from the tour in the second paragraph may be inappropriate for this article
 * I'll keep them because Moon's behavior was out of control during the tour, such as nearly bleeding to death and being hospitalized for over a week. Chrisnait (talk &#124; contribs) 15:25, 10 September 2020 (UTC)

Reception
 * Jim Melanson from the same magazine was also favourable, describing their concert on 11 March 1976 as "a superb performance by a superb band." → Jim Melanson, also from Billboard, lauded their concert on 11 March 1976 calling it "superb." ✅

. Overall a good article. I would recommend listing it for copyediting as the reception section stood out as needing some diversity in language.DMT biscuit (talk) 21:37, 8 September 2020 (UTC)