Wikipedia:Peer review/Timeline of the name "Palestine"/archive1

Timeline of the name "Palestine"
This peer review discussion has been closed. I've listed this article for peer review because i'd like to take it to WP:FLC after input from the wider community. The list covers a topic which has been studied for a least the last 300 years (e.g. Reland in 1714). It was created three years ago, and has proven remarkably stable. I'm hoping to get feedback on what improvements could be done so it can have a better chance of passing at FLC.

Thanks, Oncenawhile (talk) 07:23, 12 October 2014 (UTC)

Comments by Borsoka
 * An interesting article about a topic I am not familiar with.
 * My suggestions:
 * the lead should be shortened ✅
 * there is no need to use so many bold texts (Filastin, Palaestina, etc) in the lead ✅
 * in many cases primary sources are cited without a reference to a scholarly work, which may contradict to WP:NOR✅
 * it is not clear why the "British Mandate period" is the last section in the article: has not been the name "Palestine" used after this period? ✅
 * there are "harv errors" in the Bibliography section, suggesting that some scholarly works are not or are not properly cited in the main text (Adrien Reland, Martin Noth, David Jacobson) ✅
 * references 22 and 25 do not point to any scholarly work✅
 * Great work. Congratulations. Borsoka (talk) 03:52, 17 October 2014 (UTC)


 * Many thanks Borsoka. I have been through the article and addressed these points. Oncenawhile (talk) 08:48, 20 October 2014 (UTC)