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Toy Story
This peer review discussion has been closed. I've listed this article for peer review because this article has passed GA for over a year now and I intend to take this up to FA status at least.

Thanks, Darth Sjones23 (talk - contributions) 05:29, 18 January 2011 (UTC)

Comments Lead
 * "Although the film was a huge box office success, the film is currently Pixar's lowest grossing film while the film's second sequel Toy Story 3 is their highest grossing film earning over $1 billion worldwide". Need a comma after both mentions of film.
 * "View-Master released a three-reel set in 3D in 1995 prior to release of 3D films." Needs a comma in here.

Plot
 * "Woody, a pull-string cowboy doll is the leader of a group of toys that belong to a boy named Andy and come to life whenever humans are not around." Needs a comma after doll and Andy.
 * "Andy's next door neighbor (until his family moved) Sid Phillips has been kicked out of summer camp earlier and Woody explains to Buzz that Sid is a person who tortures and destroys toys just for fun." ...And after Phillips.

Animation
 * I would try and find a citation for the $20 million advertising budget.

Theme Park Attractions
 * The Disneyland Park link for the Buzz Lightyear's Astro Blasters attraction is a redirect to a disambig page. Link to the correct park.

References
 * 23, 26, 28, 32, 37, 44 are all dead links and need to be removed, replaced, or found in an archive.

I know its not much but i hope this helps. Eddie6705 (talk) 21:35, 18 January 2011 (UTC)