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Trauma (medicine)
This peer review discussion has been closed. I've listed this article for peer review because it is rated top quality but seems to be stuck at C class. What can I do to improve the article? Thanks!

Thanks, Peter.C  •  talk  03:49, 6 August 2010 (UTC)

comments. I'm not sure that people outside of medical profession (not to mention a single wikipedian) can tackle the subject. Recruitment of competent contributors is the main priority.

Another priority is to focus the article, starting with the definition. Right now the lead begins with: "Physical trauma refers to a physical injury that poses a threat to life or limb". But the article is about trauma in general, not just physical. The reader is confused: what if neither life nor limb are threatened? A broken clavicle does not threaten life or any of the limbs (at least in developed societies). And it's treated by trauma surgeons in a trauma ward. Why was it excluded? The line between injury and trauma must be explained very clearly. Note that different cultures and different jurisdictions have different definitions of trauma, injury, accident, incident, disability etc. Start with just one, well-researched environment and check everything against this system.

Example: the lead is sourced to the Trauma Manual printed in the U.S. This roughly sets the system of definitions. But the chart of "incidence of accidents" is based on a Danish source. Their underlying criteria of an accident may be completely different from the U.S. practice. So someone must reconcile Danish and American sources and, when necessary, explain the difference in the caption.

Cheers, East of Borschov 13:38, 12 August 2010 (UTC)


 * 1) I mixed the Trauma Manual and the Taber's Medical Dictionary definitions and came to the conclusion of "Physical trauma refers to a physical injury that poses a threat to life or limb". I believe they meant that if a limb could be threatened if not treated, should add that it is only a threat if not treated? 2) Do you know where I could acquire information to replace the Danish table? I brought it up on the talk page and never got a proper response. Peter.C  •  talk  20:04, 12 August 2010 (UTC)