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Tron: Legacy
This peer review discussion has been closed. I've listed this article for peer review because… Old peer review cancelled due to construction tag still being on, have to re-submit.
 * Previous peer review

Thanks, RAP (talk) 14:04 26 May 2012 (UTC)

Comments The Rambling Man (talk) 09:05, 7 June 2012 (UTC)
 * What is CLU?
 * See WP:DASH for en-dashes in the lead rather than spaced hyphens.
 * "Kosinski wasn't interested" avoid contractions.
 * Last para of lead is odd, talks about how the production started in 2009 and then.....
 * And filming is active, so more likely "took place" than "occurred".
 * " abandoned Video arcade" no need for capital V here.
 * " Sam discovers a secret chamber in which Sam unintentionally " in which he...
 * No need to capitalise Light Cycle.
 * Don't think you need to link science, religion, medicine...
 * Nor sunrise.
 * "Owen Best plays the seven-year-old Sam Flynn." not sure why that needs to be indented. Would just add it, referenced, at the end of the main character bio.
 * "became the first feature film created entirely from computer animation" is that actually true? I thought there was live action before it became the computer animation?
 * I'm not sure you need to use ref [32] 8 consecutive times. Probably once per para would be sufficient.
 * "We also get a glimpse ..." not encyclopedic writing.
 * "along with a special presentation of material " why "special"?
 * "40 minutes of the film" most of the time I think we avoid starting sentences with a number.
 * Don't overlink 3D.
 * "That is not interference or a production fault" who said it was? Just explain what it is, not what it isn't.
 * Don't miss the diacritic on the Galapagos...
 * No need to link France.
 * " stradivarius" is a name so should be capitalised.
 * "used it a large scale simultaneously" I don't understand this at all.
 * "being then followed by " no need for "being then".
 * You link CSS but not GIF, why?
 * "Tron themed monorail passing through Epcot at the Walt Disney World Resort." period not required.
 * (enough of main body for now)
 * Don't mix date formats in the refs for the same parameter (i.e. don't have yyyy-mm-dd and dd mm yyyy mixed together for, say, access date).
 * Check titles for SHOUTING and incorrect use of hyphens per WP:DASH.
 * Decide if author names should be First Last or Last, First and be consistent.