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Twin Peaks
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I'd like info on improvements etc. in order to get this article in shape for a GA status.Jv821 (talk) 12:24, 10 April 2008 (UTC)

Ruhrfisch comments: While it is clear that a lot of work has been done on this article, it still needs some polishing to get to GA status. Here are my suggestions: Hope this helps, Ruhrfisch &gt;&lt;&gt; &deg; &deg; 04:09, 15 April 2008 (UTC)
 * I would try to find a model GA or FA article to follow - there are many FAs on tv shows.
 * The lead needs to be expanded and should summarize the whole article. See WP:LEAD
 * The article needs a serious copyedit - for example (just in the lead):
 * Created by David Lynch and Mark Frost, Twin Peaks's pilot episode was first broadcast on April 8, 1990 on the ABC Network, until June 10, 1991. The until June 10, 1991. is presumably when the first season ended, but the sentence makes no sense now and needs to be clarified.
 * After its debut in 1990, Twin Peaks became a top-rating programme ... - I think I would write top-rated and spell it "program" (American show, use American spelling)
 * In its longer second season, declining viewer ratings led to a cancellation. first off I would write "its cancellation." This sentence seems odd, there is no previous clear reference to the length of the first sentence, and the second paragraph starts by saying how popular the show was.
 * Currently, NBC Universal's (also the current owner of Bravo) horror-themed cable channel Chiller, which launched on March 1, 2007, is airing the series. This is awkward. Currently is frowned on, use something like "As of 2008..."
 * Things to keep in mind with an article like this are to write from an out of universe perspective (see WP:IN-U) and to provide context for the reader (see WP:PCR).
 * The plot synopsis seems overly detailed
 * In Conception there is information on two failed movies, then Lynch is not interested in a TV show, then out of nowhere we read Early on, Lynch and Frost developed the town before its inhabitants.[2] Why did they decide to do the story and why did they change their minds about TV?
 * Needs more references for GA - for example the Epsiode format and Music sections have no refs. The direct quote from the script needs a ref. See WP:CITE and WP:V