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U.S. Capitol shooting incident (1998)
I would like to see some further development of this article. I think it could be a good or even featured article in the future as there is a lot of information regarding this incident on the web. I have focused on creating as many citation as possible but I think that has hurt my "flow". Your edits and suggestions regarding this article are appreciated! --Daysleeper47 21:29, 18 January 2007 (UTC)

Carabinieri

 * The lead section is too short, some information that could be added: why did this man attack the Capitol?, what happened with him afterwards?, some details from the event, etc
 * I personally dislike the order in which the information is currently presented in the article: I think a background section should detail the perpetrators mental illness and so on and that the information in the "the officer" section should be merged into the other ones. But this could all just be a personal preference of mine.--Carabinieri 16:33, 20 January 2007 (UTC)
 * The see also section should be removed. The U.S. Capitol shooting incident (1954) could and probably should be mentioned in the background section I proposed as should Denis Lortie's actions if you think they are relevant. "If it's not worth mentioning in hte article it's not worth mentioning at all."--Carabinieri 16:36, 20 January 2007 (UTC)