Wikipedia:Peer review/Utica, New York/archive2

Utica, New York
I've listed this article for peer review because I would like to improve it for FAC at some point.
 * Previous peer review

Thanks, Buffaboy  talk 00:32, 11 September 2015 (UTC)

Comments from Cirt
Comments (having stumbled here from my Peer Review) I see quite a lot of research and effort has gone into this. Quite well done so far. Good luck, &mdash; Cirt (talk) 23:13, 19 October 2015 (UTC)
 * 1) Thank you very much for your efforts to contribute to Quality improvement on Wikipedia, it's really most appreciated !!!
 * 2) NOTE: Please respond, below entire set of comments, and not interspersed throughout, thanks!
 * 3) Footnotes in the Notes sect - please add in-line citations at ends of these to back up factual assertions.
 * 4) Checklinks tool - http://dispenser.homenet.org/~dispenser/cgi-bin/webchecklinks.py?page=Utica%2C_New_York - shows lots of problems. Problem defined as anything other than rating of "0" or "200" or even a "200" but with side comment is not good. Recommend archiving at the very least those links to Wayback Machine by Internet Archive using WP:CIT template fields archiveurl and archivedate.
 * 5) Suggest instead of all the daughter sects for references, just 3 sects with each their own 2-level subheading, being: Footnotes, Note, and References.
 * 6) Lede intro sect is a bit imbalanced. Two-sentence-long-paragraph in lede for last paragraph is a bit short.
 * 7) This is a very long article. Recommend lede length of 4 paragraphs, 5 sentences each.
 * 8) Notable people - not sure if this needs devoted its own sect, and the pictures should probably go too. Comes off as a bit promotional in tone.
 * 9) Crime and public safety - quite a short sect to require its own subsection header, suggest just have it as paragraph within its parent sect.
 * 10) Copyvio Detector - https://tools.wmflabs.org/copyvios/?lang=en&project=wikipedia&title=Utica%2C+New+York&oldid=&action=search&use_engine=0&use_links=1 - shows copyvio unlikely. Excellent job here, well done !!!
 * 11) Quite an excellent job with referencing and use of in-line citations, throughout the article, very well done here.
 * 12) Recommend posting to WP:GOCE to request a copyedit from the WikiProject Guild of Copy Editors.
 * 13) Suggest placing neutrally-worded notice to talk pages of relevant WikiProjects linking to this Peer Review and asking for additional comments.
 * 14) NOTE: Please respond, below entire set of comments, and not interspersed throughout, thanks!
 * Thanks for the review and constructive criticism! Buffaboy  talk 03:30, 20 October 2015 (UTC)


 * 1) I think that the culture section is a little bit short. Is there any landmark or cultural properties in this city?--Pkh409 (talk) 02:30, 8 December 2015 (UTC)